Listen
Listen upon the jagged peak
Where the mournful wolves howl
Awaiting the return of the sun.
Listen
Listen to the pack song
Voices flowing harmoniously
Rising and falling with the wind
Shouting whispered secrets
Lamenting frivolity
Listen
Listen to the pack father
As he voices his eerie cry
Shattering the silence of the night.
Listen
Listen to the pack song
Voices flowing harmoniously
Rising and falling with the wind
Shouting whispered secrets
Lamenting frivolity
Listen
Listen to the pack brothers
As they join him in his cry
Savouring the joy of their song.
Listen
Listen to the pack song
Voices flowing harmoniously
Rising and falling with the wind
Shouting whispered secrets
Lamenting frivolity
Listen
Listen to the playful cubs
As they yowl their exuberant solos
Oblivious to the pack's disdain.
Listen
Listen to the pack song
Voices flowing harmoniously
Rising and falling with the wind
Shouting whispered secrets
Lamenting frivolity
Listen
Listen to the pack
Be one with the pack
Listen
Author notes
Option 4
I had the idea for this poem when a lady said to me this morning 'it's quite dark isn't it'!!!!!!! Rather mad the way I get my inspiration!
In case you hadn't guessed, I adore wolves!
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We seldom listen to the obvious
Perhaps we could all learn to communicate in a friendlier manner.
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Thank you for your entry
This is lovely. I love the refrain stanza and the repitition of the one word Listen. I really feel it brings the reader back every time, reminding them to listen. Yes I can certainly tell you like wolves. Do you have any Native American heritage?
Wa-do(Thanks)& God Bless
Tammy -
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No, I don't. I'm English through and through, but I love some of the Native American poetry and stories. I like the idea of magic in nature, and wolves seem to me like the fairies of the Earth (wow that sounds so cool!). They're beautiful and peaceful and yet they have the violence and aggression of Nature.
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I like the way you repeated the words. Adding such makes the tone and flow better. Nicely done fellow poet
Thanks so much for participating in my contest. I wish you all the best. I encourage you to keep on writing my friend.
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THank you for entering, I love wolfs too.
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This does kind of seem lyrical- I would have to agree. Pretty fair write. I enjoyed it. Thank you for entering and best of luck in my contest.
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There's definitely a certain rhythm going on. Like the way you stopped with Listen. It makes you do so. Not sure about frivolity but it works. Good one.
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pretty. thanks for entering my contest.
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So, are these lyrics? You don't have them listed that way but there seems to be distinct verses and choruses.
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When I was writing, these weren't intended to be lyrics, but several people have suggested that they could easily be so.
I haven't tried putting them to music, since I'm not a brilliant composer, but yes they would fit.
I wrote this in a very lyrical style - I was aiming for verses and choruses - and quite a few of my poems are laid out like this.
If I do ever get this put to music, I'll put a link on the page so you (and everyone else) can hear it, but I imagine it will be quite spiritual music (sort of wooden flutes and floaty choruses). -
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Wooden flutes and floaty choruses,
sounds cool, relaxing.
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nice write. At first I was expecting the poem to be about nature in general and then as I read the poem further I was surprised and glad to see that it was all about wolves. nice job. good luck and thanks for entering
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Thanks for the entry, but it's not quite what we were looking for. If you would like further explanation, please send me a private message and a link to the poem and I will be glad to discuss it with you.
Elizabeth -
wow
this is different..i've never really had someone enter a poem like this. its deep..yet so simple. very quite complicated actually. i love wolves as well. they are ellagent and mysterious creatures. wonderful..very good
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It's beautiful. It has a touch of Natice American spirit in it, and it's something I can relate to being partially Native American. I like how you described the relations in the pack and gave a sense each wolf's amount of authority in the poem. Hmm... How could this be sung?
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I adore wolves as well. When I was a little girl I used to run around my neighborhood and playground with my 'pack', howling and what not. The neighbors and teachers were a little wary...but whatever. Hahah.
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eh , your notta wolf an you cant truly relate a pack to a family only a group of freinds so i dont really care for this piece to much though its writen well an it does have a darkness an realness that most poems dont anymore. Poetry is a way to express yourself but now days its been more of a way to show others pointless words on paper about nothing , so i did like reading this an i got a filling of real writing from it so i dont have anything to say badly about it other then i dont like what it is about , the wording an the writing are very good though an its nice to see good poets now days.
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It's some awsum as inspiration, if thats what you get from one sentence by a lady, you should talk to her more often!!! lol
"Listen
Listen to the pack father
As he voices his eerie cry
Shattering the silence of the night."
Twas my fav part.
its a great poem and congrats on winning the silver and i wish you the best of luck for the rest of the contests.
Claire-Anne
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It may be mad inspiration, but it is sheer genius, how you threw this piece together! It is almost a song unto itself. You can see the wolves, and the pack mates, you can hear and feel their lament. I can almost hear the mournful echo of their cries in harmony, with their alpha. I like nature poems. Wonderful read!
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I really liked this poem. and I love wolves so that made it all the better.
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Where the mournful wolves howl
Awaiting the return of the sun.
These lines in your opening stanza really set the mood and bring up the imagery of Wolves. I could really see them in my minds eye. Your poem really brought the mood and feel of a pack through. Very well done friend.
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nice, very nice. odd the way you got your inspiration but well now you have a nice poem to show for it. I loved the second to last stanza. you can get such a vivid image from this. nice word choice with the repition of 'Listen'. great work! -Saraiyu-
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An odd way to receive inspiration, especially for a poem such as this. I love the repetition of "Listen" and then the story of the pack continues. Indeed, it is dark out for the idea of this poem, but you pull it off very well. thank you for the entry!
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This really I think would make a wonderful song. I loved the flow of the poem. You did a great job.
Kari -
lol rather strange inspiration indeed. a v good poem indeed too, beautiful in a strange way, i love it! congrats on a great poem
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