music to your ears
holding back the tears
known you for many years
you betrayed me once again
cheated on me with my freind
I hope you get whats coming to you
like the grim reaper and a dying fool
yeah I bet you think your real cool
bet you tell the whole school
When I am done with you there won't be nothing left
just another dude who doesn't know a lick
your a cheater a liar a foe
scratch that your just a male whoe
Author notes
Dead 2 U
A contest entry
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YAY! I like!! Good luck in the contest!!
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this was very good i liked the rhyme but please put which option you chose so i know you read the rules and everything good luck in the contest!
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As what I said before. I'd rip his head off. Gice dark poem. It makes me feel anger and frustration. Well done. Good luck.
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i'd rip his heart out and cut off his head, but thats just me, great write dark and depressing, nice style too, keep it up
~Oka
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very good
i liked it it was awesome
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Seeking revenge or what? lol I see this person angers you alot and i'll have to take that into consideration when judging. I like the ending
"your a cheater a liar a foe
scratch that your just a male whoe"
but I think "whoe" should be "ho" or "hoe" either one of those are fine just thought to let you know. Im not usually big on this kinda of thing, usually.
Best wishes in the contest
--Acronym
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