No sleep, just sound
Buzzing noises... no voices
Take it away
Stop before you go too far
STOP
I tell them, I scream
But I can hear them always
They think it's funny
That I try to end the constant sound
They laugh when I bury my head away
But it won't be funny
When it's their heads I bury
Deep within the dismal ground
Just to make their voices go away
Author notes
Don't ask.
A contest entry
- Prewrites Galore and Nothing More by HerbalGoat.
300 points, ended February 22, 2007, 66 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - Pre Write Contest by SensualWhispers.
615 points, ended March 15, 2007, 100 entries
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Oh my .................
...................... goodness. Wow. That was deep.
I really liked this part of your poem:
Stop before you go too far
STOP
I tell them, I scream
But I can hear them always
They think it's funny
That I try to end the constant sound
Excellent work. thank you so much for entering the contest and the best of luck to you. Kassie -
Though you said not to, I must ask what came about that lead you to this. This is actually how I've been feeling lately with a lot of people, so I actually pretty much understand this poem. I personally don't think it should be in the weird category, but yet again, maybe it should. This was a great piece, though a little confusing for what will be, most likely, the majority of readers. Thanks for entering.
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I was just doing word associations. Originally I had intended it to be someone talking about voices in their head so it wasn't suppose to be the most understandable thing.
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I really like this poem it's got alot of feeling in it. The ending is great and put across nicely. well done and keep it up.
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Hannah -
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I like it. I can really see it in my head. Hope you dont really hear voices.
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