Such a vicious threat; Tedium.
The inevitability of dis-jointed
LO - VE.
Flying pinpoint water marks
dash to and fro,
like tiny tinsel sperm.
Someone once told me,
those are my braincells dying.
Stunning.
Author notes
Let's get drunk with russel crown and head butt some fucking kangaroos!!!
good TIMES
A contest entry
- Short by Bryan K Johnson.
900 points, ended February 2, 2007, 33 entries
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An interesting poem. I won't pretend to understand it, but it was fun trying to do so. Russell Crowe you mean? Yes, those were good times.
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Another stunning piece, Fire-Pistil!
I think it's so great that you have the word "love" drawn out like that. That is a nice twist.
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you've gotta watch out for that. "tiny tinsel sperm" pulls the whole thing together, gives it color.
brilliant as always.
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An interesting write.
Let the ink flow and your fingers dance
Rosemary -
I think you said it all in the first line, "Such a vicious threat; Tedium". And a truism when love of any kind is involved. For me the rest is superfluous, though well done. Once again you dominate. Good luck in the contest.
jill
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