The farmer sows seeds
beneath the ground he spends each day upon.
He plants blossom trees
and waits for fruit and crops to prosper
but as darkness descends
the locusts gather in the old man's field.
Author notes
option's 1, 2, and 3. greed, vandalism, society today.
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Soft and brilliant.
Final score: 8.9
Thanks for sharing.
VIRGOAN -
This is my first time to read this poem. I will be re-reading all the entries like I usually do.
Initial score = 8.0
Thanks for sharing and keep on writing my friend.
VIRGOAN -
this is somewhat sad. but this vandalism you speak of is a beautiful way of mother earth deciding these fates.
short simple and to the point in imagery and color ties.
thank you
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Interesting poem. It says something, but it's a lil obscure. Great job and good luck in the contest!
<3 Jenerali -
What is the moral here? It feels like your poem doesn't have an ending. It seems like something is left unsaid. Thank you for entering my contest.
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Another beautiful nature piece... I love the word sews as it makes me think of time and how it heals many things and yet troubles many others. I loved the way you went with this.
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i liked ths poem, but what style is it?? that was a requirement in my contest; I need to know this for my project thank you
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Thank you for subjecting yourself to my review. I like the concept behind this poem, but the first stanza seems to be a little awkward for me. It doesn't seem to flow quite right. I really like the second and third. Not sure what it is about the first one. Do you think maybe it would sound better without the word upon at the end of it? Just an idea you can take it or leave it.
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Short and vived but it also feels like you did not finish it, still it is a really nice poem. thanks for entering
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Short, yet terrifying vivid. I like how you skillfully change the scene from contentedness to one of fear and darkness. Thanks for entering.
DancingRed.
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oh goodness. chills. but you already got a trophy for this nice piece please let others have one
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Thank you very much for entering this contest. I may add much more of a comment later on since there are so many other submissions.
You may want to keep in mind that I will try to open more of the same contests one after another if I can earn enough feedback to do so which I must say would be truly appreciated. Altogether, I hope this will also give everybody a glimpse at one of you're favorite accomplishments which hopefully in turn inspire them to look at what else you've got. -
Oh wow. That was deep. It reminds me of so many things done in vain...but yet it still has to be done in hopes that it will someday prosper.
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A lot said in just these few lines. The hard work we put into things in our life does sometimes get stepped/trampled and stolen if we are not too careful and somewhat guarded. Nice metaphor!
good luck in my contest
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Thanks for entering. There is a musicality to your words that belie their weight.
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This poem made me smile at the end. I knew where you were going the second I started reading, but I love the quick, painless, unattached way you executed the end.
The length of this poem is perfect; were it any longer, if would have been too heavy and not worth reading. And your meaning, your overall point to this poem, is felt by everyone during at least some part of life. No one is left unscathed by the unjustness of fate and life, and you've relayed that with an expert mind. Marvelous job, and thanks for entering my contest! -
I thought you have wonderful imagery in this piece. It has a message for everyone though and i really liked that. I thought that it was really well writen. But good job and keep up the good work.
Lindsay
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well that kind of takes the warmness out of being patient...I think that this is a very good analogy for society as a whole...nicely written
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Wow thats some imagery for you. You feel bad for the farmer he puts all he has into growing the crops but at the end its all destroyed by locusts so like life no matter how hard we try outside forces can always mess things up.
Good luck in the contest
Bravo -
Short and sweet. Nice poem.
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This is what I like about poetry - you can say one thing and actually mean something else. In the end more than one interpretation can be right, just depends on where you are. A good right on putting it all in and then having it all taken away.
Let the ink flow and your fingers dance
Rosemary -
I really like this but I somehow don't feel like i'm grasping the whole meaning
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This is the state of fear to which most of us live. The rest find peace in their ignorance. I find peace in mine. I think we need to be careful and prepare, but not let the worry controle our lives. Beautiful write. Thanks for entering.
Bryan -
ahh cool!!!
This was really good! Short, but really good! Shows how sometimes, sadly, the work farmers put in... only goes to waste... how unfortunate... =/ Great job and good luck!!!!
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Spot on!
An excellent little poem, Alex, with a bleak message. Are all our endeavours in vain? Will there always be "locusts" ready to undo our good work? Great metaphor for the trials and tribulations of life.
Bill
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ok, here is what i read into this very well written poem. people can work and do their best at al that they do, be it careers or relationships, and yet there will still be times when things beyond ones control can undermine and even destroy all that one has done in a lifetime.
am i close? i really loved this poem!
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The tender care and patience of a farmer working his field, planning for the future only to have the locusts the beneficiaries of his diligence, is a fine example of survival of the fittest, irony, hope and frustration. This is a poem that one can read many ways. Quite thought provoking. Again, a well written poem that showcases your creativity and ability to write. Well done my friend.
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i get when you have something that you want to grow there will always be something ready to ravish it, this is a great poem and i think you dida wonderful job on it keep it flowing and good luck in the contest
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Very Well Written
It is a very creatively well written poem. It will have different meaning for every reader. To me other than literal meaning which is obvious, says what life and love is all about. We do our best to make our lives better but the darkness at times prevails and breaks it into pieces. Same with love, we sow the seed of our love, nourish it with tenderness and warmth of our hearts but when deceived, that's when the locusts gather in our hearts. I love the structure, short & sweet yet captures the deeper meaning. Good luck in the contest. Take Care & God Bless
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Really cool man! True! Now to me this is a true beat poem that shows the futility and absurdity of life. As sad as it is, it projects a sense of humor that is amazing. Congratulations! I would give you 10 points for this winner of yours but I don't know how to. I must be really stupid, huh?
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Life ~
This is what Life is all about.....it's a shame to admit it, but this is a dying world in which we live.......Keep the Faith and keep praying ~ -
Amusing
Reminds me of the parable in the Bible of the sower. But you did a nice write and I enjoyed reading it. We all wonder what our actions and decisions will bring in the future. However, you didn't say what the locust did to the seed. Who knows they had to destroy the mans work?
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so they plant again. a cycle that never ends. very good. this flows well. you did a wonderful job conveying this. keep writing poet. God bless you
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