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choir poem one:::

we lay with broken hips
and unhinged fingertips
we will breath like there is no air
and the fog is becoming our dispair
we will speak like we are reading instructions
'slot a into b'
we will smile like we are okay with it
like it was meant to be
we will look into each other's eyes
like how stone makes you feel
numb.
unreal.

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ha. bored. in choir. tell me what you think?

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  • AwesomeJoshsome
    January 30, 2007
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    Hmmm

    It was good, I don't quite get it all but im a guy so im not supposed to get everything! anyways, it has good texture and good emotion put into it and It was a great read all the same

    Good Write
    ~AwesomeJoshsome~


    • artisticxpoetry
      January 31, 2007
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      haha, it was writen for a guy, so maybe i will have to change it so he will understand..thank you tho i am happy you like it