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Enchanted Mirror


 


I found it just per chance the awe inspiring mirror,
Beneath the silver sky appearing just before me

For I know not whence it came or how it came to be
Yet there it was before me this black and silver mirror

A mystical appearance lending substance to my dreams
I have never seen such beauty as this enchanted mirror

Dare I approach this glass and step into its door
Not knowing where it leads, the gate of this old mirror

So I hesitate an instant reaching out my hand
My heart decides my fate to step inside the mirror

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Author notes

Ghazal style

A Ghazal is a poem that is made up like an odd numbered chain of couplets, where each couplet is an independent poem. It should be natural to put a comma at the end of the first line. The Ghazal has a refrain of one to three words that repeat, and an inline rhyme that precedes the refrain. Lines 1 and 2, then every second line has this refrain and inline rhyme, and the last couplet should refer to the authors pen-name... The rhyming scheme is AA bA cA dA eA etc.

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  • pranj
    July 12

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    As far as I know Ghazal is a hindi or urdu form of poetry....I never knew people write in english in this form too...!
    Then maybe you must be writing Kawalis in english too!!!
    as for the poem - WOW!!!! SUPERB!


  • Tirrell
    January 7

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    A beautiful poem and the form is brings the imagery forth quite nicely, deepening the poem itself. A beautiful immage very much so enchanted.

  • Tirrell
    September 4, 2008
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    This is very enjoyable, I have read about this form at shadow poetry's archive of forms, but have never really come across one till now. I enjoyed it well.
    Blessings to you, and the beauty of imagery.


  • Grateful
    November 6, 2007

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    i enjoed the way you linked the idea between two lines and liked the 3rd couplet. i am also new to this form in english. but i have posted two ghazals "within" and "eyes". you are invited to read these ghazals. I hope you do read. please keep writing ghazals.
    thanks. all the best.


  • Blue Rew silver member
    September 5, 2007

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    This form brings words out in chant-like reads.
    I like the repetition...I use it myself a bit
    to lend a certain magic to the theme. You start
    with an enchanted object; so each {form & theme}
    blend seamlessly to create a magical atmosphere.


  • Ignis Corpus
    July 19, 2007

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    good job on this piece it was beautiful. the flow was alright. and i wish you the best of luck in this contest. much love,
    beautifuldisasterxx


  • Lj-
    June 24, 2007

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    Could you explain this more clearly? There doesn't see to be a rhyming scheme, especially where you have pointed out one. In just looks like one repeats the last word of the first line at the end of each following stanza. The 'AA' the you list is your rhyming scheme in the author's notes, further confuses me. I assume 'A' equals 'mirror' in this poem, and if that is so, the first line does not end in 'mirror' as pointed out.

    I'm very confused. I would appreciate it if you could be more specific, because I need to write in this form for a contest. Thanks.


  • Luna Tique Fringe
    June 3, 2007

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    Beautiful, my dear. I am in constant amazment of your mastery of so many forms. This a very interesting story. As it so happens, I understand this very well.
    Quite a prediction, that's how it reads to me.
    LOve, Luna


  • rhondasail
    May 21, 2007

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    This is the first Ghazal I've read that has not been translated from Hindi...and you've done a mavelous job with the form. I like the 'story' here as well, fantasy...different for me in a Ghazal...well done! Peace, Rhonda


  • hoodoolover silver member
    February 25, 2007

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    Goodness this is beautiful, I will indeed investigate this form, thanks for pointing me in this direction


  • Never Fall in Love
    February 23, 2007

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    I've read SOOOOO many ghazels before
    but they were all in hindhi (indian language)
    and i have but one question
    where did ghazels origin from?
    because that's the main style of poetry in india

    erm .. but it normally goes in a different way
    like ..
    just one stanza where the second rhyme comes back
    how to explain?
    aBcBdBeB etc
    normally just a four line stanza though
    I liked your pic

    NeveR ♥


    • Amera gold member
      February 23, 2007
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      thank you, there is more info here:http://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Ghazal


  • Manoura xx
    February 11, 2007
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    oh darn...i still have lyk ten more poems that i didn't read from yours but i have to go...oh well..ill go finish off reading them in lyk...whenever i finish...haha...BYE!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!

  • Manoura xx
    February 11, 2007

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    is the first lyn supposed to rhyme cuz the pattern is "AA" bA cA...etc...so shouldn't the first two rhyme???or did i just misunderstand???whatever...gREAT JOB HERE!!!!!ohh...and when i read what kind of poem it was i had to laugh because in arabic, Ghazal means dear...haha..i donno why that's funny but it is...HAHA...okay...excuse me whyl i go jump around...
    .....................................................................................
    DONE...okay...um...about the poem...ya...you know what im gonna say..GREAT JOB!!!!!BYE!!!!!!!!!!1


  • grannyeri gold member
    February 1, 2007

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    Have written one of these before when I took a class on this form. So many unique forms that just take practice so one becomes familiar with them. Liked this interpretation of the picture.

  • enigma-78
    February 1, 2007

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    WOW

    As usual you have an awesome write, using your tallent. I like the style and your use of metaphors. I like how the poem deal unsureity of life and how we find our answers. Very well writen


  • January 31, 2007

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    Very Introspective...

    This is a very introspective poem. Do we dare look at who we really are? Will we be shocked by what we see? You words do tell a story.

    Awe inspiring mirror – taken aback by what you see. As you were walking “carefree” or “wandering without direction” but the mirror did appear out of nowhere.

    You can attribute the mirror to many things yet it could represent a personal epiphany since you state “A mystical appearance lending substance to my dreams”.

    You hesitate and question it.

    “Dare I approach this glass and step into its door
    Not knowing where it leads, the gate of this old mirror”

    Yet in the end “listen to your heart” and take the next step…

    Just do it!


  • zochit2me gold member
    January 31, 2007

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    A beautiful poem that goes very well with the picture. One typo tho..."hesitative" I believe you meant "hesitate" but all in all a wonderful penning.
    good luck in this contest
    Becky


  • Rosemary Stroebel silver member
    January 31, 2007

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    It is an enchanting poem and tells a fairy tale story that is entertaining.

    Let the ink flow and your fingers dance

    Rosemary


  • yourbentangel
    January 31, 2007

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    LOVE THIS

    I positively love the vocabulary used in this write. It has vivid imagry and wonderful flow. The beginning captured my attention and was held through the whole write. LOVE THIS


  • Poetdontknowit
    January 31, 2007

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    NICE!!!!

    What extreme vocabulary you have congered up for this awesome piece. It is beautiful. And the form you have used is sure a new one on me. SWEET!!!!!!!!!
    POETDONTKNOWIT


  • Fire N Ice
    January 30, 2007
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    AS ALWAYS....

    This is perfection penned by a true poet,
    just fantastic hun

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