I am nothing more
than a toy you have cast away.
Out of date, discarded
too easily replaced
Eliminated, disposed of
ditched, discarded
exterminated, eradicated
tossed overboard into
a sea of depression.
What is wrong with me?
friendship was all
that I ever could have,
yet time changes people
and daily events
alter perceptions.
She will never be good enough
How can she? She is not me.
This is what you wanted right?
To see me break down?
To finally admit
everything you have been saying for months?
I told you it was dangerous,
I told you that you were lethal,
A drug habit I can't shake,
but neither can you...
I don't care who "approves"
who likes her or not,
In my mind she will always be
a dirty little slut.
She could be an angel
an innocent,
chubby cheeked cherubim,
I DO NOT CARE
I am Out of Date,
I am over cooked,
Now that you have no commitment
you are free to leave me,
just like everyone else...
You will leave me too...
Author notes
A little rant... not to be taken seriously by a certain person... I am just grateful for your contest... thank you.
Poetryistherapy
A contest entry
- FEELINGS by x Bright Eyes x.
900 points, ended February 7, 2007, 18 entries
Honorable mention
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
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"I am nothing more
than a toy you have cast away."
Great sorta metaphorical type lines here,
not sure what to call 'em but it adds to the poem just as much/more.
Not sure if I like the CAPS. Takes away from the poem a little, but thank you thank you for your entry into Prewrites6. Best wishes. Thanks for sharing.
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Thank you for your contest submission, I do need to ask you review the rules and edit your submission appropriately. Please IM me and let me know this has been done, thank you.
An interesting piece filled with emotion. I do suggest a slight review for spellling and punctuation, but overall a decent write. Best of luck in this and all of your endeavors.
Hetohke'e * 
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Contest note accepted as name requirement exception, submission accepted
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yeah, i can relate to this in my own way. nice poem
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well..i know who its about but I'll leave that out of this =].
Anywho It is a great poem, flows great...the list of ways to the same the thing:
Out of date, discarded
too easily replaced
Eliminated, disposed of
ditched, discarded
exterminated, eradicated
tossed overboard into
a sea of depression
personally seems a tad redundant.
( plz don't take it personal..I'm just being honest)
But other then that I enjoyed it.
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your welcome and it is nice to rant it gets your feelings out and relaxs you also i think its the best way to do it also i thought this was good and i enjoyed reading this and thanks for entering and good luck
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