Doest thou love me truly dear?
Tell me sweetly as thou comes near
Wilt thou love me, just for me?
Then come my love, let's sail the Sea!
Author notes
I'm not used to writing such short poems.
A contest entry
- Can You? [A Challenge Waiting For A Call!!] by crimson rose 247.
500 points, ended February 7, 2007, 9 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
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Not bad
Poetically speaking, do we really have to go back to seventeenth and eighteenth century poets, today is our today, write in todays theme and perhaps in two hundred years time someone will notice what you have wrote!
Doest thou love me truly dear!
Would you today ever ask someone that question? I certainly hope Not!
The poor guy would probably run away.
It is not that I don't like this poetic speech! it is just that today we need poets like yourself to reveal something of oneself in writing prose that will truly reveal oneself!
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haha, made me get a grin on my face and warmed my heart. I loved the short simplisticness of it all. Reminded me of the love that I have with my girl. Well done! Peace, JT
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JT all I meant is that you could write a poem and in lieu of referring to the Sea you could refer to the Air in some way as you are in the Airforce. Clear as Mud?
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oh how romantic! this is so sweet. it just captures ones attention. i like that part, lets sail the sea. theres just something about it that touches the heart. your talent is growing. keep writing poet! God bless you
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Short poes have more depth than longer ones I believe. Sometimes you just don't have to say everything, like when your in love. Very well done. X
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Short is good
A short poem, like a short skirt on a beautiful woman, hides much mystery in a short space. I am fond of both. This is such a nice invitation type poem, that I cannot resist it. I am the bull in the china cabinet; lol. I shall fall head over heels into it! "Let's sail the Sea!" sounds so promising. Walt. -
AWWWWWW
This is so filled with romance!
I love the use of Shakespearian English in a poem it brings out the mood, and you did it well here. Its simple sweet and elegant.. am usin it in future reference to wedding vows, since all i got was like 'marry after me and your dead,' kinda thing goin on. Whaaat am posessive, obsessively posessive!
thank you for your beautiful submission and good luck in the contest. -
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Thank you for your lovely comments. I am glad you enjoyed this poem.
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