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Unsaid Words

Whenever I see you my heartbeat increases,
And some how my temperature decreases.

Words come out from my heart,
But it stops before it reaches my vocal cord.

To tell you or not to tell you--- I always have confusions,
Like Prufrock, I can not make simple confessions.

If I tell you will I lose my respect?
Or, will you think about it from a positive aspect?

Will I tell you in a restaurant or in a park?
Will I look at your eyes and tell you in the dark?

I will ask you to become mine,
You will become the Queen of my heart and will reign.

You might say that you did not feel in that way and you are free like a dove,
I will tell you that I am just a boy standing in front of a girl and asking for her love.

Will I say all these and we become lovebirds?
Or, will I better keep them in my heart as unsaid words?

Author notes

Option 1
1.William Shakespeare’s Hamlet (“To be or not to be”)
2.Prufrock: T.S. Eliot’s “The Love Song of J. Alfred Prufrock”
3.The fourteenth line is influenced by a scene of a film called Notting Hill.

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  • warrior-eagle
    October 5, 2007

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    I will tell you that I am just a boy standing in front of a girl and asking for her love.

    I am seriously in love with this poem


  • warrior-eagle
    September 23, 2007
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    Aw,I enjoyed this very much,.


  • Mrs-Gollihue
    August 4, 2007
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    This poem was nice. Keep up the good work and best of luck in this contest.


  • DenyMyLove
    June 29, 2007
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    Thank you so much for entering and good luck!!!!
    ~DAWN~


  • Heavenly Angel silver member
    June 14, 2007
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    A very sweet write this is...nicely done
    Thank you for sharing and for being a part of the contest


  • Loveandblessings2u gold member
    February 14, 2007
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    love is the most beautiful feeling on earth, yet it can hurt so bad. i guess one can say that love really is taking the biggest chance of your life and praying for only the best. this is very enjoyable.
    thanks for sharing.

    manyblessings2u
    joyce


  • honey bear
    February 6, 2007
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    thank you for entering with this very lovely write. love must always be reached for even though sometimes we are rejected, we must never give up trying for out there for each of us awaits a soul mate great write, good luck in the contest


  • Poetic Aphrodite
    January 30, 2007

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    Thankyou for your beautiful submittal, this one is far different from the other entries, and really caught my attention, Bella

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