The day I die
Is when everyone feels so alive
The day of hearts
I feel mine depart
I know I'm not all that worthy of love
I am the opposite of a dove
Always looking for a partner
But I knew I am not looking for a darner
Or Someone to patch my broken heart
Nobody could love my whole or part
Because I don't think I could let them in
For fear I might be torn thin
So this day that everyone holds hands and blows kisses
I will be in my room thinking of all my remisses
And the thought of being alone
Turns my heart to stone
I hold up my blade so familiar
The air around me becomes chillier
I longily place the metal to my wrist
The cut making up for evry time I saw a girl being kissed
This Valentine's Day, like most, are the bloodiest of my days
I cry knowing my heart will never be set ablaze
A contest entry
- My Bloody Valentine (CONTEST) by Touchof1der.
900 points, ended February 2, 2007, 15 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
Comments
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This reads like a dark, hungry soul exposed... the pain and torment burst from the loins and spill out across the page. Very vibrant and emotional. I appreciate you taking the time and making the effort to enter my contest. Thank you and good luck!
♥ Touchof1der -
i really liked this piece. very raw, very personal. your use of words are quite creative and well placed. the only thing i would suggest is using a few more adjectives to paint the right picture for such a raw piece. and i think a lot of people can really relate to this. everyone has experienced heartbreak or resentment for those experiencing love. it really is a good piece. i hope things get better for you.
<3 Vixx
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