People laughing, dancing, clapping;
White boys in the corner started rapping.
Follow the trail of nasal cokes,
You'll find the telling of stories and jokes.
You'll find me on the floor, dancing to the beat,
A cute, fun guy I'm hoping to meet.
Led him to the dance floor and see what he’s got,
Because if your gonna dance with me you've got to have a lot.
My friends are all here just havin' a blast,
If you here to stand, you're not gonna last.
By the end of the night, we'll all be spent,
This is something that you can’t prevent.
Everyday I’m with my friends, I can always count on a smile,
So swing on by, bring some snacks, and come and stay a while.
Trust me on this, having fun is not a myth,
Because every day is a party, when you love the one's your with.
Author notes
I was having a good day and wanted to write something about my friends and how much fun we always have together.
aabb
A contest entry
- I need LIGHT by Darcs Dove.
550 points, ended February 25, 2007, 32 entries
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Friendship
You did make me smile.
Friends are one of the most important things in life. They are an added flair that God put on this Earth to help us through. I enjoyed this poem. My favorite part was the last line. It struck truth. Every day is a part when you love the ones your with. Its an amazingly true sentence. It flows with your poem. I especially liked how your rhyming scheme fits. Not everyone can rhyme that good and not make it feel ackward.
Great job!
Ashley
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3 claps...9pts
Reward from the Lionsloves Lair reading list
~Lilac
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Such an uplifting write and life sounds a lot of fun for you right now, and so it should
There are a few mispelled words that need attention but putting those aside, I thoroughly enjoyed reading your poem...it flows smoothly with rhyme and has some fun imagery running through it
Love and smiles
~Lilac
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This is great, positive and happy, takes me back to some very fun memories of my own. Well done.
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Great!!!!
This poem was such a pleasure to read. It's good that you can write about the fun you have with your friends. Friends can mean so much at times. Life is to be enjoyed. Keep enjoying.
~Snappy~
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Fantastic!!!!!
You did a great job expressing the fun you have had in this piece! Keep that pen flowing. Best of luck in the contest. -
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Thank you and i will.
Ro
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And Fun this one is!! What a great job you did here. When you can fun with the ones you are with, and enjoy yourself and love it, then you are doing something right. Keep them coming.
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Thank you! i had fun writting this and my friends mean the world to me. Thank you for commenting.
Ro
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A very good write and fun read. Good imagery, flow, rhyme and tone. Good expression of feeling. Nice assonence.You paint a picture that I can plainly see.
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Thanks you for the great comment. I'm glade that you liked it. Thanks again for taking the time to read my poem.
Ro
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You spelled 'your' wrong. It's spelled 'you're'.
I thought this poem was well-written, except for the few times that you spelled the aforementioned word incorrectly.
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no problem!
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That was great! Sounds like your a party kind of person.
I like how you had the end lines ryhming -
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lol yeah i like to go and have a good time, especialy with my friends. Thanks for the comment.
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Hehe. Life is great
I love partying. I wish everyday was a party. Great write
Lucas
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yeah tell me about it. so do I lol. I'm glade you liked it.
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