Stars
twinkle
in his eyes,
the western range
etched on his tanned face,
strong hands lay down the rope,
his hat tipped in silent prayer
as the crimson sun slowly melts
into the Milky Way, and looks down
upon the campfire as he drifts to sleep.
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Etheree
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A contest entry
- Cowboy Poetry by Maybe Anastasia.
390 points, ended March 16, 2007, 17 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
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Great Etheree Poem and it feels that even aside of the increased syllable-count by line, each line's image feels to build and grow in seeing the total scene of this poem.
Really lovely, lovely poem in form and imagery, and best wishes to you in the contest!
Jo
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a beautiful write, very descriptive and matching the picture very well. A very enjoyable read. Many thanks for sharing and good luck with this contest.
Rory -
hey I have just started a new website let me know if you want some of your work added.
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Great imagery even without the picture I would have had a great image within my mind. Perfect wording on this perfect Etheree.
wishing you luck though I don't think you need it.
warm hugz
Frozentearz -
lovely etheree! you capture so many details and images in such a short piece and manage to set a beautiful ambience of this solitary peacful bliss...
well done, Susie and good luck!
rachel
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I really like this. It is a very good write (: the only thing is in the second to last line where it says that looks down I would make it and looks down it might make it a little clearer. Nice write though (:
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Looks like an Aussie campfire! Beautifully written Sis and could picture it without the picture but you have a knack of showing not telling in all your pieces.
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