I'll say what I have to say
Then I swear I'll try and go away
I'll do what my pain pushes me to do
Then I swear I'll rid myself of you
I'll hit you and beat you until I bleed
Then I swear I'll try and find someone new
I'll keep screaming in your deaph ears for what I need
Then I swear I'll try and forget that there's no point
I'll throw myself at the walls, killing this seed
You planted within me, I don't want anything of yours
I'll say what I have to say
Forgetting the hopelessness
Knowing I would be talking to a wall
I'll scream until my very last breath
Bleed myself almost dry and crawl
--Away
I swear I'll try to understand
Why you didn't stay
And why you didn't care when you knew that I would lay
Myself on the floor in blood, dieing
I will try and understand in some sick way
--Your love and jaded devotion for me, while crying
I'll try seeing it through your eyes
I swear I'll try to excuse all your putrid lies
And understand
Just what made you leave that day
I'm going to say what I have to say
And then I swear I'll force myself to go away.
( I wish I were as invisible as you make me feel... )
Author notes
"corrupt my soul"
A contest entry
- Love is the slowest form of suicide... by Yours-To-Have.
500 points, ended March 22, 2007, 79 entries
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Honorable mention
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
this is non-fiction for those that wonder
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hi i thought this was really good i enjoyed reading this and the flow in this was great thank you for entering my contest
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very well writen! This is beautiful! the only suggestion I really have to make it bettrer is your rhymeing, though very well used and creative, changes patterns a few times.
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I love the line "Your love and jaded devotion for me, while crying " Its so cool!
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Thank you. I appreciate the encouragement.
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This is sutch a good poem.
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thank you, and I wish u the best of luck with your contest
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this was a great write..your words were powerful,strong and emotional as well..this was a very well written poem and it flowed very smoothly keep writting your talented and good luck in the contest
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i absolutly love the last line!!! amazing! thakyou so much for entering and good luck!
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thank you and the best of luck with your contest
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I'm lovin it :)
Great work here. keep it up. my favorite lines were,"Your love and jaded devotion for me, while crying
I'll try seeing it through your eyes
I swear I'll try to excuse all your putrid lies
And understand
Just what made you leave that day "
-AkaBaki
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Very good! "dieing" is suppose to be "dying". Just so you know. I don't want you to get docked points for that. I like that last line(the one in parathese). It makes you think about what you said before. Thanks! Good luck and hold on tight!
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thank you.
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aww its ok
This is a powerful poem...you have done a wonderful job..again i must say you have talent...and this guy is just not worth your time...you will find a guy that will treat you like you deserve to be treated and then this jerk will just be a bad memory and you will finally be able to move on...oh and i almost forgot to tell you it is possible that i might have a small crush...i'm still scared to date or get involved with anyone but i am determined that my asshole ex boyfriend will not take that away from me too...every guy is not like him and i will always be wondering what if...if i dont give other guys a shot...i hope this poem that you wrote helped you release some of the pain in your heart...its a great wright and i enjoyed reading it
Talk to you latter
Take Care
Countrychick06 ( Melissa)
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