Did you ever...
Want to be someone else?
Did you ever...
Wish you could change your life?
I strived to be the best...
Daughter I could be,
The best friend I could be,
The best of everything I thought I should be.
No one ever noticed,
I was a failure to you all.
You made fun,
You tore my world apart.
Nothing...
To me that is what I am.
Striving...
To be what you've always wanted me to be.
Will I ever be good enough?
For you,
For anyone at all...
Maybe just to notice once.
Will I ever be the best?
For you,
For anyone at all...
Maybe the best just once.
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What do ya think, any changes.....
Written June 9th, 2003
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*applauds* soooooo beautiful! I love it..I use to feel that way. I don't really know how I feel anymore..hm anyways- awesome job dear!
<3 nikki -
this is a great poem!!!! its amazing how u made it meen so much....i could really tell that u meant every word put into this poem....its a horrible feeling to never be good enough for anyone...including ur self....i know that feeling all too well....it gets really hard sometimes to feel good about urself when u see nothing good about urself...great poem....thanks for sharing it!!!
shelie c -
This evokes a lot of feelings that we've all had! A good question of identity here.
Were this mine, I'd take this very good theme and leave out the "you" every time it's asked. It will improve the strength of it.
did you mean to use the words "just once" twice?
Just wondered.
Other than that, I like it!
content- touches all of us!
form- free and easy...simply written
Thank you for sharing something that is obviously bone deep! Good one.
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To thine ownself be true, as for the others, they've no clue to who the real "you" is or was or ever shall be! This was very well done. Thanks for sharing it with us.
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I have often wanted to be someone else. I will see someone at a stop light in a car next to me, and they look so care free and I wonder where they are going. It doesn't matter to me, as long as it isn't the same place I am going, and I long to trade places with them. Good write.
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I have been there with you on this one! I have something very much like this I have never quite finished. Thanks for putting into words what I was not able to! Just be true to yourself, You will find the peace from within to be much more satisfiable than from anyone else!
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I agree with Valkricry on this...couldn't have said it better myself. The important thing is for YOU to be good enought for YOURSELF.
You did a fine job on this piece. I like it alot and the feeling are effident. well done. Blessed be
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Someone once said to me, when I was lamenting that I never seemed 'good enough' for so and so, " but, hun, the question is are you good enough for YOU? " I think I was about 16 at the time, and those words stuck with me. I never listened to the nay-sayers again. I like it the way it is.... Val
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