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I can't walk away.

I have wondered,
I have cried,

I have tried to uncover,
The truths that you hide,

I have yearned,
I have forgiven, 

I have tried to be everything,
That I thought you ever wanted.

I have witness pain,
I have mourned my shame,

I have tried to move on,
Too not to miss your tender touch,

I have felt the ache of loss,
I have felt the thrust of love,

I have tried to wipe this tear away,
I have tried to walk away from you, my love.

Please tell me what you think, and if you think there is room for improvement please say.

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  • Danny Havoc
    November 27
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    Truly superb, excellent.


  • Neha Kaushik
    March 22, 2008

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    Awesome

    a beautiful creation.. i felt so much pain and at the same time your love for that person.. a very well written piece.. thanx for sharing..


  • Nobody126
    February 6, 2007

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    Beauty

    wow...the ache of loss?...beauty.what a beautiful expression.very sweet, brief and to the point...but the ache of loss is there...i can feel it.


  • Ahkam silver member
    January 30, 2007

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    Very Sweet.

    the poem has a sad mood but the expression is superb.well, i dont understand what you mean to say in these lines..Too not to miss your tender touch, ..and the concluding line , i think, you need to add something more to make this complete..as you said , ...I have tried to walk away from you, my love...but what next?..