Oh, to be with you,
My divine angel,
Ah, to make this true,
At last may it be...
Oh, to touch you inside,
My beautiful death,
Ah, that night when you died,
Supress the laughter...
Cringing tears,
Thoughtless fears,
Shattered dreams,
Unreal screams...
The blade so cold,
My deathly hold,
Horrible confusion,
Tired frantic illusion...
Oh, to love you more.
If only I could,
Ah, cut to the core,
And watch as you bleed...
Oh, to hear those screams,
Frantic and cold,
Ah, just like my dreams,
Where I too die.
Love and suicide,
Laughter I have cried,
Bleeding a sour note,
As I slit my own throat...
Crumbling against you,
...Oh, how I Love you...
Painting your skin red,
At last I am dead...
Falling in darkness,
I await you there,
A touch of glistening skin,
Ignites the life in this enigma...
Please tell me what you think
Comments
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Wow!!!
Fantastic!!!
Great use of descriptive narrative, metaphor and imagery...
Rhythm flowed naturally & leads us to a brilliant final line 'Ignites the life in this enigma...'
Loved it!!!
Well done!!!
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Very beautiful... my favourite lines,
"Crumbling against you,
...Oh, how I Love you...
Painting your skin red,
At last I am dead..."
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Thank you.
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