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Trade

Please death come to me
I’ll trade you for the one you’ve taken
Please hear what I say
All this time I cried
Wishing the darkness to come to me
Yet you denied me everything
So please I ask once again
To let her breathe
So I kneel and beg
Take all I am

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  • Radiance
    March 3, 2007

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    Wow, this is sad. It's very awful, that death doesn't work like that. No matter who dies, whoever's left alive has that pain and emptiness inside. This is a beautiful, heartbreaking piece.


  • bloodymary180
    January 29, 2007
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    [sniffle, sniffle] you sure me cry