Imperfections wailing their fury in volcanic eruption of hatred,
Driven by jealousy of pure hearts and kind souls worthy of love,
Over the cliff of obsession for perfection and self destruction,
Into the heart’s river of dreams of deserved fate and hopes of pain,
While wishing for sense to realize beauty behind the internal agony,
The inner beauty which we must all find within ourselves by rummaging,
Clearing our way through the mind’s clutter of cruelty towards ourselves,
By weeding our way through the negative and towards the rose garden,
Which contains the beauty within us all, the beauty which can’t be found,
By a selfish soul unworthy of love, while wishing for the joy of others,
That can’t find her way through a darkened tunnel towards the light,
The light that reflects the purity she has, but is unwilling to accept
Author notes
It's really really bad, and cluttered, and junky, but I TRIED. I tried to put myself in it, I tried to write this for my Oma to make up for the contests I never posted in, but it's not the best. Maybe another opportunity will come up for me to make up for not entering other contests though ^_^
I tried to make it sound like a sort of...journey I guess? But I so failed XD
A contest entry
- Closing in 24hrs OR After 25 Entries!!!! by Celticmoon.
450 points, ended February 1, 2007, 18 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
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Ahhh my sweet child,
This is far from rubbish!
For a young ladt that tends to write ore stories than poetry you have done an awesome job with this. I doubt you could have penned a piece more perfectly befitting to show your soul tha you have here. You have opened and allowed us all to dive within you and take a swim in the warm loving lake that is you.
Bravo!
Love
Oma
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aww, beautiful Nikki and so not rubbish
It's wonderfully written and does seem like a journey through the soul. Love love. 
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Are you insane!?
Rubbish! Your Notes are rubbish I say because this is just beautiful. It speaks volumes and it channels a way through to your very heart within all of the hatred you have for yourself, luvie. I adore it, just as I adore you. I think you did an absolutely magnificent job!
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Thanks, Rose-chan. That makes me feel a lot better. I just hope that Oma likes it
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Nikki
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wow
perfect.. it's just so good
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Thank you for reading and your comment.
Ferret
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