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Lamia

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I am Lamia  

                         
and O to be invoked from cryptic shadows
                       I relent in my Lilac scented beauty


I bask in the darkness                  
                                waiting
waiting in the shadows for your incumbent arrival
                              I relish the silken cover of fog
that blankets this unholy necropolis of rest


    I come to steal your seed                                  
                         to impregnate my feverous womb
with the larvae of the damned    

              
I am specter in red the harlot of death
                                        and I will rob your liquid of life
as I hiss at the hilarity of your innocence 


I am Lamia

 

 

 

 

 

Author notes

The concept of Lamia is from old English legends. The lamia was said to appear in graveyards as a beautiful woman who draws young men to their deaths. She would lie in wait for a naive victim, looking as if she needs his assistance in some way. legend has it that, if you see such a woman in a graveyard who appears to need help, you are supposed to call out to her, for the Lamia cannot answer back, since she has a snakes tongue and can only hiss.

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  • Overlord Darklight
    July 8

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    Scarlet and Succinct.

    Again, Lady Amera... You have impressed me yet again, Dark One. You have been blessed with a mindgift, Angel and my only hope is that someone tells you this each and every day that you breathe. "Hiss at the hilarity of your innocence"...
    pure genious. I have added you officially as my first favorite. I recommend her piece entitled "Thirteen Swings" as possible perfection; all should kneel before that particular testament. Well done, again Amera.


  • Peteskid gold member
    July 4

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    I think we can learn a lot about a culture when we look at the legends, many are dark, expressing fears and warnings handed down from generations, where often somewhere there is a basis, a truth or an event... a an eerie mood here, very well done...PK

  • glory
    February 24
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    Dear Lamia,

    I see you and I do like this poem alot.
    I could go on about the content, but I leave it.


    • Amera gold member
      February 24
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      Thank you! I am surprised to find a comment on a poem that I had written so long ago.


  • Tirrell
    December 28, 2008

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    I salute your depth of knowlege of folklore and urban legends of the world, I love this one very much, it has a subtle beauty in it.


  • Dark Otter
    February 22, 2008

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    Research

    I'm going through your series on demons. My curiousity is what has piqued your interest in these legends of time. Good visual imagery and language choice. thanks!

    • Amera gold member
      February 22, 2008
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      Thank you
      I love poetry of all kinds and genres. I write in over 50 forms and all genres, this demon series is only a fraction of my portfolio.


  • LadyDementia gold member
    January 1, 2008

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    Thank you very much for your wonderful entry. Very well penned indeed. Best of luck in my contest and a very Happy New Year!


  • Green Manalishi gold member
    December 15, 2007

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    I truly enjoyed this piece, though I have always understood Lamias as D&D portrays them, lion-bodied centaurs, more of a cross between a vampire and a sphinx than any non-corporeal undead. This is truly an excellent write with groovy script!


  • Ithica silver member
    November 7, 2007

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    I love the way you play with myth and put your own spin on these legends. The author notes are great and who knows, just might save some poor saps life, if he happens to run into her that is, at the local cemetary! I mean hypothetically speaking that is_ssssss


  • Shikamaru-Nara
    October 18, 2007

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    I'm sorry I'm going to have to remove this wonderful poem. My rules state no erotica and this is pretty close.

    Disqualified. Removed From Contest.

  • uaithne
    September 5, 2007

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    Your love of legend is evident, as is your willingness to play with alleged truths. I have really enjoyed this as I did Submission. Your conceptions are delightful little tales which stimulate the soul and labour the mind. Cheers


  • xxRainbowDawnxx
    July 11, 2007

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    "Invoked by Cryptic Shadows"

    Very well presented here. I have never heard of the Lamia and therefore am fascinated by this lore. I may look up this creature in the future, just to see some more facts .


  • Kappa Pyua
    July 11, 2007

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    This one was not hard to understand, even for dark poetry I actually liked reading this one. Don't understand the structure though makes it look misaligned or something just doesn't look right to me.UNT


  • RedAquarius
    June 14, 2007

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    " I come to steal your seed
    to impregnate my feverous womb
    with the larvae of the damned "

    Great lines there!! The line breaks and spacing in this also help contribute to the dark atmosphere you've woven. Another entrancing write.


  • DK akaLunaticSerene gold member
    February 26, 2007
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    Oooooo she's just downright nasty! Delicious shivers!


  • Myth Of Twilight
    February 23, 2007
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    wow

    wow i think i will like this great poem it has a toch of evil to it thnxs for telling me about it


  • Aeonna
    February 11, 2007

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    DARK MASTERPIECE

    umm, i take it back, this one is my favorite, grrr, you are not making easy on me, chosing the favorite poem among your series.. DARK MASTERPIECE, KEEP IT COMING..

    FLEUR DE ROSA


  • serenity silvermoon
    February 7, 2007

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    dark notes

    the poem was great but the athers notes were better this was a very dark poem thanks for sharing and god bless SIGN: DI.


  • Firequeen
    January 31, 2007
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    Spooky

    I enjoyed this alot
    thank you for your wonderful entry
    keep up the great writing
    Fire


  • panegyric ink
    January 31, 2007

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    A Winner.

    You have opened my heart with these thoughts of such myth. Your expression did this apparition so much incredible justic. A mistful way you've sung your heart's thoughts with this one!!!!
    Beautifully said!!!

    • Amera gold member
      February 1, 2007
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      Thank you so much for your comment on Mara; she's in my demon series. Please don't think of me as a psychopath. I'm doing something different by trying to express the emotions of female demons in the first person. It's driving the historians nuts because I use real legions and my own interpretation of the events.

  • Black Swan Rose
    January 30, 2007
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    beautifully worded...


  • Manoura xx
    January 29, 2007
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    wooow...another inspiration to me...haha...BYE!!!!!!!!!!.. oh ya...and great job!!!!!!


  • soldiersoul gold member
    January 29, 2007

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    WALK WITH ME ELF

    Ah, but a Grave Mistake indeed Young Fellow, to let Your Loins guide Ye to Her ghastly Bossum,
    Taunting Thee from behind a Stone marked in Thy Name, Beauty beyond compare at Her Illusion,
    Lamia comes in Shyness, Her scent the Lilacs that have wilted at Her shadow never Cast,
    Sacrifices made to ward off the Charming Gentlemen, Flowers upon a Graven image never meant to Last.
    ( inspired yet again by the ELF )


  • Im3
    January 29, 2007

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    Clandestine thoughts

    A soul blended with hers, could show her beauty, as they met in the night. I love this, in the way you set the character stage..then you lead us through the night. Then you take the blind fold off with this line, "I come to steal your seed to impregnate my feverous womb with the larvae of the damned" It drove me crazy, and made me crave her. Well done

  • enigma-78
    January 29, 2007

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    WOW!!

    You have penned an exelent write here, i love your use of metaphors, I like how you have told the storey, the style you have used, and i like your choice in music on this...


  • Lamia
    January 28, 2007

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    Yay for educational poetry. The reason I clicked on should be obvious haha, but it's a very nice piece of work. Well done


    • Amera gold member
      January 29, 2007
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      OMG! you're Lamia! Well i hope i did you honor


  • toots
    January 28, 2007

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    I love when not only can I enjoy a piece of poetry because of its poetric elements, but when it teaches me something.

    This is interesting both in subject and in subject treatment.

    Great use of words...imagery...all that jazz.

    However...let me chime in on the conversation about the "to" on the seed and impregnate.

    If it had been me...I would have left it off all together.

    For some reason prepositions throw me in poetry...the less of them, them more I like it.


  • Subiri Ars Poetica
    January 28, 2007

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    As someone who studies old english texts and as a lover of lore and myth, this was certainly something that i was intrigued by when i saw the title. it was quite unexpected however to see it done in such a mode. People tend to surprise me in how they read old things that I would never view in such context. Personally I think that you could take this poem as a basis and then rework it using the actual terms of the legend. It would be more effective and self-explanatory. Probably a little more interesting than a normal erotic or whatever kind of poem you were going for here. Good luck.

    keep writing

    mark

    • Amera gold member
      January 29, 2007
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      I want to personally thank you for the most intelligent critique on my poem of all the others. You mentioned a way I can improve them but didn’t go into detail. I know my research should be better. I like to demonstrate the sex but only implied I hate porno. I’ve done several female demons I think my best was succubus but you missed that one. I’m not just doing horror for horror; I’m trying to show the emotion of the actual legions. Please answer me; I think I can improve.

      • Subiri Ars Poetica
        January 29, 2007
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        First: http://www.pantheon.org/articles/l/lamia.html

        Second: I would probably choose an omniscient narrator, focus more on victim, story, personality of the subject, their emotions, and definitely more setting! Setting can make or break a poem, and it is important to give enough background to support atmosphere and tonality of the subject. The scent support and some of the other elements you used in this one are good, but you can always add more.

        mark

        • Amera gold member
          January 29, 2007
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          Thank you Mark, you're wonderful. I'm doing Rusalka next. I see your point regarding the narrative ye I still think if done properly I can achieve my goal using the first person.


  • January 28, 2007

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    Whoa!

    This is very good. Deep research into women. This is very exciting to read.

    It is very telling on how these legends started.

    Do you not agree?

    " I come to steal your seed to...

    to impregnate my feverous womb with the larvae of the damned"

    Was the 2 to's intentional?


    • Amera gold member
      January 28, 2007
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      yes, do you think it adds impact or should I delete ine?


      • January 28, 2007
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        modify it

        FROM:

        I come to steal your seed to... to impregnate my feverous womb"

        TO:

        I come to steal your seed to... impregnate my feverous womb"

        Just remove the "extra" to


        • Amera gold member
          January 28, 2007
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          Ok, but I did it a little different I left the "to" in front of impregnate


          • January 28, 2007
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            Excellent!

            Great job my friend!

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