Trembling behind this masquerade of pieces falling apart
I try to stand firm
I am not ashamed
to reveal my broken heart..
The echoes in my mind of what happened that night
are haunting my every thought...
I try to forget just to get through the day
I try to remember
so I will not fumble my words
I wanna scream
I wanna cry
I want to move on
then I want to die
But still I try be strong
I am weak in the arms of my friends
I am vulnerable in the grasps of my enemies
I am torn in to two
will this ever end
I need to find a quick remedy
Cause I can't bear another "I'm sorry"
and I can't live with another regret
It's not fair that I have to go on living
with things I'd rather forget
I can taste his disease
I can smell the smoke in the breeze
I can feel his every touch beggin him please
Let me go
let me be
leave me alone
let me sleep
but still he doesn't give in
he just goes on corrupting my every bein
I know he will not take no from me,
but still I gotta fight
Don't blame me for his sick pleasures
he needs to know whats wrong and right.
You can deny me that I've been hurt
but you can't erase my pain
you can tell me I'll be alright
but don't promise me this will go away
because I'm wise enough to see
that I was a pawn in his sick game
so don't point the blame at me
I didn't ask for this kind of shame
I'll contine to wake in the morning
I know the sun will shine again someday
I'll try to keep forcing
a smile upon my face
but if I fall and I'm sure that I will
will you be there to catch me?
I need to know that I'm not alone
and this darkness I confess
will not posses me
So if I cry
will you be there to hold me
and if
I try
will you be there to help me
If I fight
will you stand beside me
and If I die
will you be there to mourn me
Because I can't do this on my own
without a helping hand
I know I'm strong
and I'll survive
but will you help me if you can
I'm broken and confused
and I feel betrayed and used
I just wanted you to know
that I needed you
Author notes
Blisteredandblue/BE RAW
A contest entry
- Give Me [[RAW EMOTION]] by brittany.geeze.
525 points, ended January 8, 2008, 18 entries
Silver trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
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You're a finalist!
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Wonderful.
It's emotion explodes onto the page and pulled my eyes as close to the monitor as they could get.
Wonderful Job.
Thank you so very much for the entry.
Keep Writing
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Thank you so much..When I wrote this I was devestated! I could hardly type because my tears were so heavy the screen became blurry..but I managed to finish it..I'm so glad you enjoyed it...Also thank you for that reminder I went ahead and changed it thank you!
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oh i forgot- you need to go back to the contest page and read the requirements because the username and stuff is not supplied in the authors notes box. but other than that- fantastic job!
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omg
this almost made me cry. i swear i will be here forever and always for you. you will make it through, and i will be right there to help you. whoever this bastard is, pardon my french, i wou;d punch the living hell out of him for you. again, pardon my french. this must have been hard for you to write and put this on here. if you ever need someone to talk to, ill be here for you. i swear.
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Thank you for your compassion! This happened a couple of years ago it was hard but I lived through it,,,life goes on! but again thank you
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mery pood
wow
i am struck by the courage, wisdon and heart you put into this work
it displays lots of strenght
although you pen a lot of human frailties
shame, confusion, regret, confusion, lonliness, helplessness
what comes thru is just how strong you are to face these obstacles
basically, you actually are defeating them
"but still I gotta fight"
you are the winner
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Stunning!!!
This is so goddamn well written! It explains so much of how I felt while I was going through my divorce five and a half years ago. You penned this absolutely perfectly! It also explains part of the reason I no longer believe in any god..... but that's a different story. This poem was deep, sad, heartbreaking and I relate to it so fucking much. Excellent job!
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Beautiful...
this is like two poems in one...
The emotions flow so richly through this entire piece. I stand in awe of your talent!!!!
xoxo
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Thank you so much! This was a hard piece for me to write and share with everyone! I wrote this a year ago during a long and horrific rape trial.
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shocking, powerful, elaborate. well done. just wondering about the picture thou, is our head stuck to your shoulder? may be the reason why your heartbroken, but dont worry sure youll be fine
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Thankyou! I'm sorry I don't understand what you mean about the pic, maybe you meant "your" instead of "our" lol but either way no, my head is not stuck to my shoulders...
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I like your main point. I like the way you simply thrown it upon the reader. It almost comes as a shock, but then you elaborate on it and it makes the poem powerful. Great write. And although the heartache is horrible, you will survive. We all do. Good luck to you.
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Thank you very much for your comment, and your inspiring words. It was hard for me to share this with everyone, it was an extremely personal poem. But I'm glad you enjoyed it!
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