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Love is bound

Love is bound within this tick tock rapturing of the clock life bares as a teller
A fourtune telling madman with the deliverance similar to that of a speaker who stutters

Nothing could ever be so cynical as when things seem to work out fine
When life flows through the river of justification being as passive as a star through the sky

And as fires burn away at things that take up space
Another heart is filled with ideas that it needs the mass it chooses to taste.

It backpacks through terrains
It sails through seas of destiny
Down roads paved gold with dreams
it flies through imaginations open to chance but
it's fragile enough to be

Breathing seems the relevance that being is a need
And in being we are here to be something for someone more than what we are.
We are simple in every way
So simple that it is complicated to understand
Why becomes the question we ask
When there remains more abandon words necessary to comprehend

We are the mirror to a person we tend never to meet
A mate
A soul
A half we lack
As at birth we become strangers
Yet at heart we are as twins

And the faces of a crowd are nothing less than a mosaic representing the beautiful  color of God's eyes
So many colors wrap around us as the arms that we felt safe in as a child
The blanket that covered our faces when the dark awoke within us fear
The corner that we coward in when nature seems surreal

These placebos are not liars and are never trivial in faith
But a walk we take in times when being lost is what we seek
Walks we take to free our minds of thoughts we trap and manipulate
Memories we use as the knife that finds our back

In this confusing state of common sense abandonment
We find our friends suitable for blame
Hence the knife is really ours
And our ten percent minds escape the conviction a
match of prints
sustains.



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  • DarknessOfSanity
    August 26, 2008

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    kudos!

    i loved this! it flowed really nicely and it fit well with the prompt. i loved the different lengths of stanazs, not sure why that caught my eye. but it did. anyways, great poem! thanks for entering and good luck!


  • Xx Luna xX
    January 7, 2008

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    Breathing seems the relevance that being is a need
    And in being we are here to be something for someone more than what we are.
    We are simple in every way
    So simple that it is complicated to understand
    Why becomes the question we ask
    When there remains more abandon words necessary to comprehend

    Well done! This is so deep and beautiful! Thank you for entering and good luck


  • FlipperSwitch
    December 30, 2007

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    That's beautiful, sometimes it can become a bit harder to understand in some sentences- but the subject is unique an creativly written about. Thank you for your entry


  • marciakay81
    December 29, 2007

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    Nice work. This line says it all...exactly what I was looking for..."Nothing could ever be so cynical as when things seem to work out fine, When life flows through the river of justification being as passive as a star through the sky" Life is so ironic, isn't it. I also liked this line "We are simple in every way, So simple that it is complicated to understand" Thanks for entering.

    • Loveprevails
      December 30, 2007
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      Thank you this is probably the most "wordy" of my poems, but I was inspired and I'm happy with the way it turned out...I'm glad you enjoyed it


  • x Gemini x
    February 21, 2007
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    First, let me thank you for entering my contest.

    Second:

    The flow and imagery was very well done. Creative perspective and conveyance. Easily related to. Great use of language.

    I PERSONALLY like to see punctuation though.

    Nicley done


  • Hadji Murad
    February 19, 2007

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    This is a nice poem. It is a little wordy, perhaps tediously so, but the message is still nice. The words are really great. Very nice job and thank you for entering.


  • Lady-Pegasus
    February 15, 2007

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    Very intense poem, to be certain. The styling is not to my liking, but that is certainly personal perference. I do find that some of your word placements make it unwieldy( eg L8 especially the last 8 word half of it). Although technically correct, it makes the flow off kilter, to me, as well as other examples throughout the piece, though that one stuck out the most to me. I do think this could use some slight repolishing and realigning, but if you are happy with it, that is what matters!
    Best of luck in this and all of your endeavors. Peg

  • scarlet21
    February 12, 2007
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    this is very well writen, very original and poetic. but i think it lacks direction. i also found it unorginized, i think it would have been a better read if it would have ben more structured. i realy do love the way you wrote this though, very good.


  • Jeb
    February 8, 2007

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    Nice

    Once again you have penned an excellent poem. This seemed very heartfelt and much of it I believe is very true. It has a great flow to it. While I dont agree with refrences to god because I became an athiest 6 years ago, everything you wrote seemed to fit perfectly. Great job writing this poem. Many kudos to you and good luck in the contest.

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