A million stars above my head
warm sand beneath my feet
A dance for the magic that lay ahead
As two lust filled bodies meet
Author notes
I'm a girl
A contest entry
- I wanna feel loved ! by Live with a passion.
450 points, ended November 8, 2007, 52 entries
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Comments
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This poem makes me feel warm, mainly because you imagery comes to life (the warm sand)
Your clever in the way you've used the night time sky but the day time sand (its hot) but this leaves it open to interpretation. It could be hot due to the love of this couple, or it could just be the sand they are making love on.
You could even be referring to the sand and sky as the lovers, meeting at night when the night falls upon the ground.
Very very clever,
bookmarked!!!
lexy xxxx
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