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I Fall For You

I can't stop falling
You stand and watch
But you do nothing
You walk far away
Walls close in on me
There's no escape
You alone hold the key
To push the walls away
But you're too blind
By short infatuations
I hold you in my mind
But you never look my way
The walls are closing in
The ground is getting near
My heart is running thin
Unable to protect itself
I can't stop falling
You stoodd and watched
But you did nothing
You walked far away

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  • AngieMae
    February 5, 2007
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    This poem has a good foundation of emotion. I think you could take it a little deeper, but the feeling of being trapped and abandoned was well conveyed. One thing, in the third to last line you misspelled stood. Keep Writing!