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Rebirth Legacy

Flowers crumble, new ones birth


Light Brings in a new day -
Darkness brings in a new night.


Tears heal -
Bringing laughter


Captivating fresh memories

 

Seizing the day for all it's worth


Each thread is sown delicately


The Rose in us becomes alive


Painting a beautiful picture


The legacy continues
 

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The vase was a Synchronicity = 'meaningful coincidence'

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  • Nighttime angel
    March 17, 2008

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    Beautiful that is what this poem is.. so full of hope. life begins, then ends and then starts again.. it can be beautiful that depends on the individual.. you have painted a wondrous picture.. I love it.

    thank you for entering & good luck

    kat


  • zhaniswolf
    February 26, 2007
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    very well said. good last line as well... "the legacy continues" great ending to a great poem


  • seraphim shock
    January 30, 2007
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    Beatiful and touching. Almost as delicate as flower petals. Good job mom.


  • Angel With No Halo
    January 29, 2007

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    This is really beautiful my sweet Kari!!! Inspirational and wonderful. The serenity of was perfect. The meaning so very true. You are such a great writer hon!! Keep it up !!

    Love,
    ~Krys~


  • Erotik Rose silver member
    January 29, 2007

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    This is so wonderfully beautiful, great job with poem and thank you for sharing this with us.


    Mistress


  • Whoochi gold member
    January 29, 2007

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    memories

    Very good write, Kari...reminds me of what was and what will now be....Beautiful


  • real irish rose
    January 29, 2007

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    Kari, this is a very beautiful write and one that alot of us can relate to I know at the moment I can.
    Very beautifully written and as always my little sis a pleasure to read ...julie xx


  • Lady Altheia
    January 28, 2007

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    Flowers are beautiful indeed. I love roses especially red ones. They are my favorite. Flowers have their own language.


  • Barbara gold member
    January 28, 2007

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    I've started a new comment way of not reading any of the other comments before I post...
    So...

    Nicely done. It's a wonderful poem, and I noticed the little vase look to the lines there....intentional or not? I like the double meaning to 'sown'...the thread, and the garden.


    • Kari gold member
      January 28, 2007
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      lol it was a total fluke..I am shocked that it came out like that lol


  • freespirit51
    January 28, 2007

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    Great write my friend. You have done a marvelous job with this one. and I love the vase design of your words. Lots of meaning and thought provoking words. You keep getting better.


  • catz Moderators member
    January 28, 2007

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    I think this is just about the most beautiful thing you've written, Kari. I love it!!! It's going straight to my bookmarks. Was the vase shape deliberate or did it just happen to turn out that way? It's certainly fitting

    The life between the first line and the last is so well spoken. You could have a two line poem complete if you chose to

    "Flowers crumble, new ones birth
    The legacy continues"

    Those two lines say it all, your words in between enhance the life between.

    You've come a long way since we first met, in your writing and in your outlook on life, do you realize that, Kari? I see a beautiful lady, inside and out there between the the crumbling flower reborn and the continueing legacy.

    An awesome piece, my dear. Excellent, Kari

    love and
    Granna


    • Kari gold member
      January 28, 2007
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      That was a fluke..I had to reread my own poem for a few seconds and now I see the vase lol..cool! Thank you so much for your comment..and you really don't have to bookmark it if u don't wanna...blushing...I'm still learning and not sure on it


  • me steve
    January 28, 2007

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    A beatiful painting picture

    Thank you very much, I loved the entire piece just loved it. The words
    Tears heal -
    Bringing laughter
    Just sit back and let them sink in. I mean such a wonderful thing a pen is to be able to write such four words that have such power to start a new day and to say goodnight to the last.
    As always you possess a wonderful neat talent that is and will be forever more.
    My how we at A/P have been blessed yet a again. GOD BLESS and keep them a coming STEVE


  • Bedroom Eyes
    January 28, 2007

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    What do ya mean "I dunno..."? This is a great write that shows a cycle in constant motion. Short, sweet and to the point.

    Flowers crumble, new ones birth

    The legacy continues

    The corrilation between the first and last lines tie it all together. Well done Kari


  • pattyann4500
    January 28, 2007

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    Did you know you made a vase? I'm assuming you did. I love how you have painted a picture with your lovely imagery. Beautiful, Sweetie. Hugs, Grandmama


  • WinE-reDpuddles
    January 28, 2007

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    oh wow. this is so beautiful!!!! my fav lines:
    Light Brings in a new day -
    Darkness brings in a new night.
    nice kari tek care.



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