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*~ Cement Gardens ~*

Missing image

~*~

Lovely

Bluebonnets in

spring. Winter has ceased to

bind your desire. Seedlings are deep

within.

~*~

Blossom,

inhaling warmth

from dry cement gardens.

Expand your green thriving leaves to

flourish.

~*~

You may

smell my fragrance.

Perfumed powders of blue

enhance our time shared together,

touch me.

~*~

I look

forward to greet

you after winters' freeze.

My strength must continue to love

just you.

~*~

Gather

my seeds, planting

them amongst your flowers.

Quilts of sewn fabric are no match

for you.

~*~

My heart

leaps for joy when

walking down the sidewalk,

and there you are, waiting, always,

my Love.

~*~

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

Author notes

 

Mostly nature, but Love is definately a factor in this write toward Nature itself ~
 

 

 

 

 

 

Garland Cinquain

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  • tawk gold member
    April 24

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    Wow amazing as always and so beautiful. Such vivid imagery and emotion throughout. You are so talented with the written word, congrats on all the well deserved trophies, good luck in the contest. Have a blessed weekend my dear friend, hugs Theresa


  • sunoir
    April 5
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    wonderful... makes you believe life can be beautiful even in cement. kudos


  • kareneisenlord gold member
    April 4

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    oooh... so delicately sweet

    Nature's love for us; and our love for Her. Sensitive and precious in every way. I could almost smell the lovely flowers. Delightful... thank you!


  • BuriedTreasures silver member
    February 9

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    Excellent!

    An excellent composition with the beauty portrayed through your words.
    Congratulations on the bronze award!--
    Well Deserving--An excellent work!


  • Paloszoo gold member
    January 30

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    Gee, I wonder who this is by? Bear, your personal beauty shines through in your work. This is such a stunning piece. I'm in awe, as usual. I thank you for entering my humble contest. It's always a pleasure to read a favorite's work


  • Tam
    January 5, 2008

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    wow...

    My Handsome Teddy Bear! I read this poem ELEVEN MONTHS ago...and yet I remembered it instantly when I clicked on this poem...that alone tells you this is MASTERFUL PENNING...
    your form is excellent but the message within these well choosen words...IS TIMELESS...making this poem truly brilliant, sir...
    I LOVE THIS WRITE...
    so happy to find it here in this contest wearing tin...
    BIG HUG!
    Congrats!
    I wish you love!
    Tammy
    xoxoxoxoxoxoxo


  • islekine gold member
    January 3, 2008

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    What can I say?

    You are so good at form....
    I'm trying to learn.....This is beautiful...and the picture is perfect...
    Write on!
    Thanks for entering!
    *PEACE*


    • Arkbear gold member
      January 3, 2008
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      Thank you Julie ~

      I am most proud of this piece, and it only won Gold the first time, because the contest it was in only had ( 3 ) entries.....hehe ~

      I'm glad you can appreciate Formed Poetry.....and thank you for the opportunity to re-enter it with many more entries to compete against ~



      Be well and be blessed,

      Bear ~


  • Robin Candor
    May 10, 2007

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    This stands out as one of the best pieces I have read at AP. You are a form master, and had I been told this was someone else, someone well published from long ago, I would not have given it a second thought. I cool in the shadow you create by the huge branches of your lyric. This is not a phony revelrie, nor an attempt to just respond to something without really saying anything at all. You caught nature, and I am sure you capture many other things as well. I can walk this walk and talk this talk because you showed me how. I cannot write like this and am enlarged to have had the opportunity to absorb such a fine piece of verse. RC


  • JeannieD Hunter gold member
    May 7, 2007

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    *sigh* This is beautiful. The title is awesome and is perfect. You have really done all those options in this write. Such beauty that touches all the senses. Well done. Thanks so much for this entry and good luck.

    Jeannie


    • Arkbear gold member
      May 7, 2007
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      Thank you Jeannie ~

      You have allowed one of my favorite writes to be re-entered into a contest of such wonderful topics ~

      I hope people can see the beauty in even the smallest of things such as a simple flower growing from a bed of cement ~

      Thank you again for this opportunity ~

      Bear ~


  • Lionsloves Lair
    February 5, 2007
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    3 claps...9pts

    A reward from The Lionsloves Lair reading list

    ~Lilac~


  • -LilacThOughts- gold member
    February 4, 2007

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    Gorgeous penning...

    Wow bro...wow...

    A gorgeous chain and so poetic with every elloquent line, not forgetting how romantic it reads, just took my breath away...I like this line 'from dry cement gardens' you wouldn't think flowers could grow from cement but I have seen it many times but also I like the double meaning as a metaphor...

    A most delightful read, I hope you are smiling today

    love you loads bro
    ~Lilac


    • Arkbear gold member
      February 5, 2007
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      My dearest Sis, Lilac ~

      Very tired right now, but trying to answer everyone so y'all don't think I'm not paying attention to your wonderful reviews ~

      ...and yes....I am smiling now.....Thank You for that ~



      I adore you,
      brother Bear ~


  • Tam
    February 4, 2007
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    OUTSTANDING!

    This picture is simply stunning! My heart always leaps with great joy at the sight of life springing forth from concrete! LOL!!! Look at that picture and tell me there is no God! LOL!!!
    This is such a beautiful write and you have mastered this form with such skill and grace it is amazing!
    I find this poem incredibly uplifting and life affirming! Thank you for sharing the gift of your heartwarming spirit within beautifully penned words...YOU ARE A GEM, SIR!
    How much do I adore my Teddy Bear?
    Blessings! Tammy


    • Arkbear gold member
      February 5, 2007
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      My Dear Tammy ~

      Sometimes you leave me speechless with your touching & kind reviews ~

      All I can say is.....Thank You......and yes.....any one would be a fool to not understand only this type of Beauty comes from a Creator........God ~

      SMILE

      Your Bear ~


  • sheltered
    February 3, 2007
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    A simple side walk decorated so perfectly by the flowers of your soul.


    • Arkbear gold member
      February 5, 2007
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      sheltered ~

      Thank you so much for stopping by and reading a piece of my work ~

      I am trying to get back to everyone, just seems sooooo much is going on right now ~

      But I do have you on my list to review your work

      Take care Bubba ~

      Bear ~


  • grannyeri gold member
    February 3, 2007

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    Wonderful verses you have penned here - getting mighty good at this form - you use it quite often in your poetry.


  • Frogzter gold member
    February 3, 2007

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    Came back for another read and this one was just as delightful as the last! Wonderfully written and presented my dear brother. I hope all is well!
    Much love,
    Sissy Frogz~


    • Arkbear gold member
      February 5, 2007
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      Sissy ~

      I do hope all is well with you as well....especially after the tornadoes ~

      Miss talking to you....ben so busy just can't keep up......tired, but trying to keep going ~

      I wish you happiness today ~

      Bear hugz,
      brother Bear ~


  • Star Shine
    February 2, 2007

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    the way you spun the words together are a quilt indeed. This is beautiful and colorful, and makes me think of spring and love. Well done.


  • Haiku-bless-you gold member
    February 1, 2007
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    Bear, a very interesting Cinquain Chain you have crafted here. Great imagery. I like the first Cinquain but suggest you watch punctuation(should be a comma between "spring Winter" and "desire Seedlings" I think). Write On Bro
    Dennis


  • -Ink Artist-
    February 1, 2007

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    Bear, this is absolutely lovely! An imagery rich cinquain chain! Your structure is gorgeous. You make me jealous! Amazing work!


    ~Lori


    • Arkbear gold member
      February 1, 2007
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      Lori ~

      You are too kind my Dear friend ~

      It is a pleasure to get to know you more & more ~

      Thank you for your time and review ~

      Bear ~


  • ShelleyA gold member
    February 1, 2007

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    A beautiful write and presentation. A well crafted Cinquain Chain. Lovely imagery, flow and tone. Lovely expression of feeling. Very good word choice. Vivid descriptives. Nice alliteration. A most enjoyable read.


    • Arkbear gold member
      February 1, 2007
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      Shelley ~

      I am humbled by your review ~

      You have taught me so much to get to the point at which I am at presently in my poetry skills ~

      You deserve a hug ~



      Thank you for your review, and have a wonderful day ~

      Bear ~


      • ShelleyA gold member
        February 1, 2007
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        You're very welcome Bear. It's a pleasure to read your poetry. Thanks so much for sharing it. Shelley


  • FisherCat
    January 31, 2007

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    Fantastic!!!!!!!

    This was a very beautiful write. I have read no other that can write formed poems as well as you. You do such a great job with your writes. A true poet indeed. Thanks for sharing, and since they are judging the contest, good luck!!


    • Arkbear gold member
      February 1, 2007
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      Fisher Cat ~

      Thanks for the awesome review my friend and thank you for the best wishes in this contest ~

      You are most kind ~

      Have a wonderful day Bubba ~

      Bear ~


  • Frogzter gold member
    January 29, 2007

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    This one full of lovely images and smell as well! You are quite good at these cinquain chains and this one is just beautiful my dear brother! Like a rare flower in full bloom! A wonderful read! Much love and many huggles... blessings and warm thoughts,
    Sissy Frogz~


    • Arkbear gold member
      January 29, 2007
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      Sissy Frogz ~

      Thank you my pretty Sis for your review ~

      ...and I know some of my writes are mostly in form, but I want to try and get these down before I move on to another type of form..........Hi.....my name is Bear, and I'm a formed poetry addict

      It is so good to see you again Sis ~

      brother Bear ~


  • Frozentearz
    January 28, 2007

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    Ooh this is great way to flaunt take a bow my Dear Bear this was awesome and amazing, and ooh so sensual a beautiful contrast with the Flower and Love
    you amazing bear you.
    Love and Light
    Frozentearz


    • Arkbear gold member
      January 29, 2007
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      My Dear Tearz ~

      Thank you once again for making your way over to my part of AP ~

      I don't know how you do it, but I will try to hop on over and review your work as soon as I get these other 12 IM's sent

      Thank you so much for making me feel good about what I am doing ~

      Have a wonderful day ~

      Bear ~


  • Sacred Ground
    January 28, 2007
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    A most lovely muse you have to inspire you... Just Lovely.
    ~S.~G.~


    • Arkbear gold member
      January 29, 2007
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      S ~ G ~

      I see you peeking from behind that tree ~
      Now come out here so I can give you a Bear hug for your review ~

      Bear ~


  • StarEyes
    January 28, 2007
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    Oh my dear Uncle,

    A breath of fresh air to warm ones soul on this cold evening!! And in this beautiful form none the less. Just what I needed this evening my dear uncle. Best of luck in the contest! and keep them coming, I'm gonna be here reading!

    Big Bear Hugs

    Love ya,

    Nyetta


    • Arkbear gold member
      January 29, 2007
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      My little Sunshine Girl ~

      My dearest Niece ~

      I sooooo wish winter was over ~

      I am so glad that southern california had b;luebonnets as well ~

      A field of them will blind you with their intense hues of blues ~

      I do miss them.....but I don't miss Texas ~

      Thank you my dear for your review ~

      Uncle Bear ~


  • tawk gold member
    January 28, 2007
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    Awe spring I wish was in the air here. It is too cold outside. Such a loving and emotional write. You have painted such a perfect picture for all to see. Good luck in the contest


    • Arkbear gold member
      January 29, 2007
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      Theresa ~

      I had to find something warm and soothing to write about after this long and dreary winter here in southern california ~

      I hope it warmed you as well ~

      Thank you for your review my friend ~

      Bear ~


  • poet2angels gold member
    January 28, 2007

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    Thank you

    I came here seeking some sort of beauty and warmth....
    I am going through something so painful right now, and watching the passing of someone you love day after day can be so cold and heartbreaking...Your poem was like a breath of fresh air...I was drawn to it. I have barely been on much but I needed a break and I chose a beautiful poem to read in beautiful form......

    Lynda


    • Arkbear gold member
      January 29, 2007
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      Lynda ~

      I am adding your name to my prayer list as we speak.....it sits here on my desk inside of my Bible which I pray over every night ~

      If I had names in general, I could add them as well......I always believe that God wants us to pray for individuals on *personal* needs ~

      I hope you have found some warmth and peace within this poem, because I too, know the difficulties of watching someones life drain from their body....my last two lovers were the hardest ~

      If I can help in any way, or if you just wanna chat...please, let me know ~

      Sending warm breezes and gentle soothing thoughts your way ~

      Take care now,
      Bear ~


  • Sandygram silver member
    January 28, 2007

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    A BEAUTIFUL POEM!!!!

    Hi Bear, Your cinquain is simply beautiful. Whether it be love or flowers, we enjoy the spring in many ways. There is so much beauty to be found in both. You write so well with the different forms of poetry. This was a lovely poem to read. Enjoyed it alot. You take care friend, Sandy


    • Arkbear gold member
      January 29, 2007
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      Sandy ~

      Such a joy to see your review again ~

      If you ever have something you would care for me to review, please do not hesistate to send me the link ~

      I sometimes find myself emerged in AP & hardly find time to get around to all my friends here and review their work ~

      Thank you so much for your review and time my friend ~

      Bear ~


  • Heavenly Angel silver member
    January 28, 2007

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    What a wonderfully beautiful and awesome piece this is, my dear brother bear! Your writing always leaves me in awe of your talent! All the best to you!
    Love,
    Your sister Sandy


    • Arkbear gold member
      January 29, 2007
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      H A Sandy ~

      Hey Sis ~
      You are always so kind in your reviews....I am honored to have warmed some hearets with this write ~

      I wish winter was over soooooo bad

      Brother Bear wuvs you!

      Bear ~


  • Whoochi gold member
    January 28, 2007

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    Gorgeous...can almost smell a sweet aroma......Reminds me of Sedona..here...when i saw a single, small lavendar flower sprouting out of a red rock....A cherished memory...thanks.....


    • Arkbear gold member
      January 29, 2007
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      Whoochi ~

      How ironic ~
      I just found Sadona two years ago on vacation ~

      I was 400 miles from home with my two boys headed toward Arkansas and of all things, we pull off into a rest stop and there is my friend, ( a trucker), who is in AA with me back in southern california, and he and I talked for a while....and eventually, he asked if I had ever taken that north highway that goes right past Sadona....and of course I said no......Well, he told he it was about 25 miles up the highway to the exit and then about 10 miles off the next highway ~


      But he said I wouldn't regret it..............and we didn't ~

      Such a facinating place to be....It went from 100* to 47* in just one hour when I started climbing the road leading around Sadona ~

      It was misty...foggy...chilly.....but it was gorgeous.....and we got out at the top and walked around.....it was really nice ~

      Thanks for bringing back some great memories ~

      Bear ~


  • sweetpearl
    January 28, 2007

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    Awesome form my favourite lines:

    "I look
    forward to greet
    you after winters' freeze"

    --that's sweet. Good job with this.

    • Arkbear gold member
      January 29, 2007
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      SweetPearl ~

      Thank you for taking the time to read my work ~



      Bear ~

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