When he's alone
thats when the darkness comes
creeping into his soul
his feelings, chaotic
his emotions, hectic
His eyes show melancholy
colors, pain there, yet
hidden, by smiles and laughter
no one knows how he feels
but the keys as he types
do the tears fall one by one
or do they run in rivers down
his cheeks, pooling at the center
of his anguish
he's searching for something
it's within his reach, yet so
far away, like a vapor there for
an instant, then gone
and he's left alone again
in this obsedian darkness
searching for a light, a sliver
of hope, i hope he will always
keep reaching and he never gives up
cause,
He's Sebastian and he's my friend
Author notes
this is just something I wrote...for a friend, inspiration hit while talking to him...may not be the best piece, but it's just something that hit me.
Please tell me what you think
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Very good sis, I can feel the emotions you are printing upon this page, the poem is well done, nice flow, and I'm sure your friend enjoyed this, and the time you took to pen it too. You're a sweetie sis, keep reaching out, you are someone's world, a huge part of mine, and I appreciate ya, and many others do too. Much love, your ap bro, Timothy aka poeticweaver~ xo
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Very Good
Darkness is something a lot of us deal with when we are alone, but sometimes a little darkness can be a good thing....I think your friend Sebastian lives in both darkness and light, and that your words are very important to him. Write on.......
Brazos
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Thank You
He said that he really enjoyed the write. It's been a really trying time for him these last few weeks, thank you so much for your comments.
Carrie
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Beautiful-
Bless Your Heart for sharing this my Friend
I imagine this will bring forth a smile to the one
You penned this for and lift Spirit's~
Beautifully worded and emotion filled
with sincerity~
Thank You for sharing Your Talent!
Many blessings to You
Best wishes too
and much love~ Desire~*~
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Thank You
Ms. Desire for your comments on my piece. I have missed you, promise I'll get back to reading soon.
Love ya
Carrie
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I felt every emotion in this. Vivid, abstract and yet everything comes together. I truly feel the depth from this. So much truth. I loved every line of this piece as its' very touching and just full of positive thoughts and energy. Stunning imagery and the flow to this piece is quite impressive. Lovely write!!
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