Scene –
she enters the
fairground of manipulation,
clutching pity like a prize to her side.
A little white lie never bruised
her multicoloured mask,
so why should she halt the ride?
She molds appreciation from
sympathy dough – a masterpiece.
Her own Statue of David,
brought into spotlight
by the regret of the touring
customers at the show.
She watches their inert
expressions, as she guides their
boat, and opinions,
squeezing every ounce of air
and emotion.
But, as her clients
call the feat to cease,
they must stand corrected.
She owns the grounds.
In a list
A contest entry
- Random by Nut Bag.
525 points, ended February 27, 2007, 51 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
Comments
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what the crowd wants..
isnt what the crowd gets. you rubbish.
haha. erm yeh its different and interesting. similar writing style to my poems about sophie.
ill enter you to the finalists, but itll be a test of whether your poem is good enough to impresses me in the end
xporcelaindolliesx -
I loved this poem. It has great imagery. You are very talented. Good job and keep up the good work.
Lindsay -
sweet
I love the imagery and the sreativeness in this poem. It interests me. I really like it. Keep up the good work. Nice words you chose to use as well.
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Wow! So much vision through your words. I love the metaphor usage in this write. You have a real creative mind to say the least! Good luck to you in the contest
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Thank you.
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I love the second stanza. The entire
piece is very imaginative, creatively
drawn for the reader to read over and
again. I thoroughly enjoyed this poem.
Love, lane -
I love this peom. There is so much meaning and feeling behind it and yet so many people could take it in so many different ways. Well done.
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This is certainly a different way of writing compared to the entries. It was good though. I liked the way you used the quote
Good Job and goodluck.
~Beks~
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This is a poem where one wears a mask, taking pity to her advantage it seems she manipulates things in her favour, atleast I understand to be the theme of the poem. You might come across one and you shared the feelings. Yes poetry is one form of sharing the thouhts. The interpretation may vary, each according to his experience..Thank you for sharing...Venu
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BRAVO BRAVO!!!!! This is a wonderful perception you have taken from the quote.... Your flow of words is great... You have painted some amazing visuals through your words.... Your title fits well, one word so strong and powerful
Thank you for sharing
good luck in the contest go for gold!!!
Tracey
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NICE
A perfect write for the cool contest. I think you have an awesome chance, I hope ya win!!!!!
POETDONTKNOWIT -
Love it!
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