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My Dreamy Adonis

I'm all alone on a tropical deserted island

There are coconuts in every palm tree I see,

I'm barefoot, I squish the pure white sand between my toes

I hear the echo from the green foilage of a monkey

I start to comb the green lush little isle

There are wonders everywhere, I eat a banana,

After I climb a tall, bustling mountain

I see signs of life in a lovely cabana

Drunken from the sweet aroma of the salty sea

I proceed to make my way towards the pure white tent,

I was offered a sweet drink out of a coconut shell

By an adonis, tanned, a toga wearing gent

I was fanned with palm leaves, and given mud facials

Never ever had to ask for one thing,

I sat in a warm springs jacuzzi

Was given a conch to blow, if I wanted to sing

Swam all day and built sancastles

I was tanned to the major extreme,

My adonis asked me for my hand in marriage

And that's when I woke up from my dream

                                                                       POETDONTKNOWIT

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WRITTEN 5/24/2006
POETDONTKNOWIT
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  • delightfulmess silver member
    July 25, 2007

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    Love the dream
    Who wouldnt want this
    Great fantasy and thank you for entering my contest



    Delila


  • xXGoddessofPainXx
    July 5, 2007
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    Wow thanx for entering and good luck to you my friend take care


  • FifthDove
    May 21, 2007

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    Gosh what awesome imagery, I want to have this dream and get a mud facial too everything sounds so “dreamy”. You’ve done a very good penning job with this poem.
    Thanks for entering my contest and well wishes to you


  • Tercil gold member
    January 28, 2007

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    One for the list

    What a dream that was. Any meaning behind this one hun? Cos it sure seems as if you are ready for a holiday, nicely tanned, this one.


  • Spiritvision angel
    January 28, 2007

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    Wow!! The dream of this beautiful land and treatment of fantasy is beautiful. You bring this island to life with your magical way of words. Fantastic. To bad we all wake up. *angel


  • sharkofdhoom
    January 28, 2007
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    wow this is amazing! keep up the excellent work!

  • Liquid memories
    January 28, 2007

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    Beautiful write

    What a lovely dream. love to have one like that of a beautiful woman and sweet and tender in love and caring. loved this write. thanks for sharing. Jules.


  • ShaShay
    January 28, 2007

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    Clever

    You did a great job of showing here. It flowed well and the surprise ending was a smile maker. Good work, pen on...


  • silent pain17
    January 28, 2007
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    wow

    a very very weird dream. you made this very descriptive, It was awsome.

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