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Cherished within heartache

 

Cherished

within my mind

those memories, so kind

Like swans dancing upon a lake

just perfect flow without any mistake

Gently gliding with nature here

with your memories near

You'll always be...

Cherished.

~

Within

the real beauty

of a moment in time

I shall alway's be missing you

like a willow tree crying on the dew

Calm waters sit on silent ground

while quiet time is crowned

Show your beauty...

Within.

~

Heartache

lets teardrops fall

the soul begins its call

In a world not having sunshine

is the day you can be no longer mine

So don't you let the teardrops go

for hurt will start to show

and cause the soul

Heartache.

 

You are....                                                               

      Cherished within heartache

 

 

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  • princess hope
    January 23, 2008

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    Beautifuly written, the form, the words, everything. Best of luck in the contest and thnx for your entry


  • -Ink Artist-
    January 30, 2007
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    Dignified Eloquence

    Gets, this is sheer beauty! A most elegant interpretation of the image. A stunning rictameter of emotion and imagery. Your pen flows so well, my friend! These lines are the perfect descriptive, just lovely.


    ~Lori


  • slipperssun gold member
    January 28, 2007

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    this is beautiful... you have done a fantastic job on this... well done and i wish you luck inyour contest


  • PerfectImperfection
    January 28, 2007

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    Very nice rictameter!!! Thoughtful, and very well expressed. A great interpretation of the picture! Well formed - with a nice little ryme to boot. Thank you so much for entering & Best wishes!


  • Inside and out
    January 28, 2007

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    This is wonderfully written. A triple rictameter is quite an undertaking. You accomplished this beautifully. Quite brilliantly expressed thoughts and feelings. Well done dear poet.


  • ShaShay
    January 28, 2007

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    Beautiful

    Your choice of words and the metaphors are very good. The message is endearing and clear. I really enjoyed this poem.


  • bluejeans51
    January 28, 2007
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    Wow you put together a very awesome poem here. Good Luck in the contest.


  • Poetdontknowit
    January 28, 2007
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    YEAH!!!!

    Awesomely done my poetic friend! This is a great write. Very tantalizing!!!!!
    POETDONTKNOWIT

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