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Moon Struck

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Moon Struck

Awake, awake, my lunar love
Together we dance in the sky
Time to arise and waltz above

Awake, awake, my lunar love
Softly glide like a morning dove
A love like ours dancing so high
Awake, awake, my lunar love
Together we dance in the sky

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Triolet

A Triolet is a poetic form consisting of only 8 lines. Within a Triolet, the 1st, 4th, and 7th lines repeat, and the 2nd and 8th lines do as well. The rhyme scheme is simple: ABaAabAB, capital letters representing the repeated lines.

Make writing a Triolet more challenging! Make each line 8 syllables in length (4 metrical feet), written in iambic tetrameter (the more common way), or try it in pentameter (English version) where each line only has 10 syllables(5 metrical feet).

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  • macandrew
    November 23, 2007

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    Very well written. An exceptional triolet (one of my favorite forms).

    John

  • Eusebius
    September 3, 2007

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    bravo

    Ah, this form is positively addictive! And this is a terrific triolet...superbly and wonderfully executed! Loved it, loved it! bravo... bravo... bravo...


  • grannyeri gold member
    August 31, 2007

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    Yes this is a challenging form of poetry to write and you have written a lovely one here. A lovely ending to this poem too -


  • poeticweaver gold member
    July 26, 2007

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    Excellent,

    You amaze me with your words that flow
    I've read you just a few lines ago
    How I know, I just see the vines that grow
    I love the form and thoughts aglow~

    Peace, thanks for sharing,
    you inspire me, peace, Timothy~ xo

  • macandrew
    April 11, 2007
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    A Awake, awake, my lunar love
    B Together we dance in the sky
    a Time to arise and waltz above
    a Softly glide like a morning dove
    A Awake, awake, my lunar love
    b A love like ours dancing so high
    A Awake, awake, my lunar love
    B Together we dance in the sky

    Now I see what you did. Lines 4 and 5 are swapped.
    Really well done. I like the imagery and feel of this one.

    John


    • Amera gold member
      April 11, 2007
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      Thank you John and it's nice to meet you. Thanks for reading my poems.

      Love,
      Amera


  • honey bear
    January 31, 2007

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    thank you for entering with this very lovely write, lovely imigary even with out the attatched picture (although that is very pretty too) good luck in the contest with this beautiful creative write


  • Fire N Ice
    January 28, 2007
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    Beauty to behold

    Your imagination just captures my heart,
    this is eligant,
    light, and so beautiful!


  • Manoura xx
    January 28, 2007

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    wooow...im going to try it..you were right..i would love to check it out..and i did..and i loved it!!!plus...the music sounds perfect with it...well great job...btw...do you konw if it is called a triliot cuz a line is repeated 3 times??? just wondering...well thanks...BYE~~~~~~~!@!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!

  • enigma-78
    January 28, 2007

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    Sweet

    This is a very sweet poem with nice rhythem, you captured love nicely in this poem, i find very enchanting.


  • January 28, 2007

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    So Musical...

    Wow, you are getting better. I am in awe! I am singing these words! "Awake, awake, my lunar love" flows off my tongue! Thanks for sharing! Great Job my friend!

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