Hes always been there but he doesnt understand
He thinks he is everything to me
He is.
I love him but I fear life.
Near suicide I write this poem.
Trying not to cry as i spill the words onto paper
that Remind me of my past
But hes here
And thats all i need
A contest entry
- I Need To Cry My Everloving Brains Out!! by Angel With No Halo.
525 points, ended February 16, 2007, 26 entries
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well written.. but suicide is never the answer hon. You have though helped that statement with the last lines..
But hes here
And thats all i need
It is true too.. all we need in life is love. I hope you are feeling okay. Best wishes to you.. and thank you for entering my contest hon
~Krys~
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you need..
to stop looking at the obvious human emotions, every gets depressed. suicude is the dumbest thing someone can do, life isnt just all good, but you have to deal with the bad, its a part of life. take your mind off it and write something more exploring, unique and disturbing. thats far more interesting, like incestuous love affaires, beastiality, etc.
good luck
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love always hurt i dont believe in the whole fairytale happily ever-after crap but i dont want to be hurt by someone who is suppose to love me and believe me everybody i have been with has hurt me until now.THIS WAS A GREAT PIECE OF WORK
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sounds like u have been hurt by the one u love.. i know how u feel pretty much all muh poetry is talking bout suicide and stuff just rember like i always tell myself just write it dont act on it
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thanx for the comment and yes i have been hurt read my other poes please and tell me what u think plz .thanx
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