Another day breaks on our, or maybe your, tiny planet
I sit quietly behind the sun
It flares and flames
Painfully but soothingly scorching my back
But never as painful as the daggers you look at me with these days
Or the thorn that you drove into my side
Over and over, without mercy and without care
My back burns and my sides split
Not from laughter this time
I forgot how to do that since you…since you...
I don’t even know what you did, but you changed
That’s what you did
You changed in ways that I never thought you could
I never knew you could be this person
How cold and distant you could be
Gravity swings me to and fro
Back and forth through these eternal acres of nothing
Black on black with bright stars placed delicately and correctly
That’s how I always thought of you once
Delicate, correct, perfect
With everything I ever looked for
I couldn’t have been happier
But now there’s only black on black
So much more than there ever used to be
Did you become this or did it become you
Was it deliberate, are you protecting yourself
From me?
From everyone?
From what?
Is it from the world that I chose in the moment to hide from
Could it be that the only way you could hide was to turn cold
A way of running
But you forgot to cover your tracks
I’m still here
I still care
So as I sit quietly behind the sun
Staring deep into the night sky
Or is it day?
I think once more of you
Maybe you’ll leave my mind one day
But you no longer seem to look for me when you know I’ll be around
I always look for
But not now
Not from behind the sun
Where I let myself burn to ashes
Drift into the a place where I know you will always look
I’ll be your sky at night
I’ll be your light at day
All you have to do is look for me
[Orange]
A contest entry
- It feels like the end of the world by Teenage Confessions.
650 points, ended February 1, 2007, 36 entries
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wow..this is...I cant even find the words to say..I could call it stamering but that is an understatement..Great job buddy=P Sarah
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Thankyou lovely =] x-Underdose-x
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Great write! I have to admit, it makes a very good poem. I like the fact that you put in a little galaxy stuff in there
"So as I sit quietly behind the sun
Staring deep into the night sky
Or is it day?"
That is a powerful part, definately.
I’ll be your sky at night
I’ll be your light at day
All you have to do is look for me
You make that person know you'll always be there to depend on! loved it
Thanks for entering, good luck
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Thank you
This person means a lot to me and always will =]
Have fun with the contest judging.
Cheers
Underdose
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I've said it once and I'll say it again, Wow. For such a young guy you have quite a talent. I checked out your myspace page and saw you said you play guitar, I'd love to hear you play as I can only assume that you could definately write some awesome music. Hurry up and get a clip already great job hun. I'm really impressed!
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Why thank you very much. I don't really write many songs, just random lyrics every now and then. I did write a song about my mate who drives a mini though. Haha!
So, yea, I'm not really sure about the music thing, been trying to start numerous bands for a while, they never seem to work properly, no one has free time at the same time. Ah well, one day maybe, it would be nice =]
Thanks for all your comments though, good to have someone interested =]
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its shit when people do that, makes you feel hopless and maybe even a tad used. nicely put daz, i like it . xx
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Aww thanks Lau
Loves
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wow!This is exactly how I feel at the moment!WOW!I love it!
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Thankyou =]
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