What if, What if
The silent clouds shift
through brilliant hues
within the dying day.
Wandering the endless
wondering realms
of
what if, what if
Shifting to pale warm embers
of a fire upon the winds of thought.
These pastels whisper,
soflty whisper deeply
"what if, what if"
Turning to the dark charcoals
the greys leading into
nights acrylics.
Ever brilliant in muted mystery
they call through serenity's echo.
"what if, what if"
My heart floats
with these clouds
as love speaks to me
in my mind.
"Dream dreamer dream
what if, what if "
B.L.House 2007
A contest entry
- Shades of Night (CONTEST) by Touchof1der.
600 points, ended February 5, 2007, 21 entries
Honorable mention
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
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I enjoyed the way you related the night to nature and all the wonders that befall the falling of the sun. Great work! I appreciate you taking the time and making the effort to enter my contest. Thank you and good luck!
♥ Touchof1der
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Nice
You've seemed to follow an idea many other people have in this contest , relating your emotions to nature but i think you have exceeded a few of the others in your piece . Good luck on the contest . -
Such a romantic piece of poetry!
I'm taken aback with how lovingly the words are penned; very well done, poet
I wish you the best in this contest
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Great Job
The structure of the poem was pretty cool. I enjoyed the read! Great job on the write, word flow was wonderful.
Hope to read more from you sometime.
Thanks for Sharing!
God Bless,
Jenna xXx -
Exquisite in its delivery. It just flowed as I read it. Wonderfully done...
Soulful Woman -
Very beautiful! I really like how you put the "what if, what if" at various spots. Really enjoyed what you did here. Really made my day reading it. Smiles, Terry
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So beautiful!
I thought this was awesome when I heard it and I think it's awesome now
Your heart speaks loud and true and that makes for beautiful poetry, sweetie!
All the best to you in this contest; it deserves only the best!
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thank you for reading sweetie Just How do you always respond to my poems before I post them I'll never figure out. lol
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