look to this day for yesterday is already
a dream, and tomorrowis only a vision;but
today,well lived,makes every yesterday a
dream of happiness and and every tomorrow
vision of hope look well therfore to this
day Such is the salutation of the dawn
Please tell me what you think
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I felt hope..good job
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wow
this was good and i hope you will wright more great poems so i can read them you are a great poet little brother thanks for sharing hope to read more i hope you had fun wrighting this poem i no i had fun reading this wounderful poem thanks for sharing and God bless you little bro love your sister always dianna
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Not Bad
It's a bit short...but other than that...I like it alot!!!
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This is really deep.Very thoughtful and very good.
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Wow this was very impressive.
Short but powerful.
I really liked it.
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This is another deeply written piece that requires only a little help in the line of layout but otherwise actually very good.
Let the ink flow and your fingers dance
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Excellent!
I very much agree with this little gem, if you don't mind my suggestions I would re-format this a bit to assist with the flow. Also try to remember sometimes less is actually more! Example:
Look to this day
For yesterday, a dream
Tomorrow, only a vision
Today well lived makes every
yesterday a dream of happiness
Every tomorrow, a vision of hope
Look well there-fore to this day
Such is the salutation of the dawn
Do you see the steps or the rhythm now on the right side of the poem? If you were to center it you could also see the new flow. Let me know how you like this now.
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Please forgive my rudeness... He made this how he wanted to try to change what he made is showing what he wrote is insulting... by trying to say it needs to be remade is nothing but rude... I mean no offense but let him make it his way
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That is very good Mikey... Short and sweet utter beauty goood job... Keep up the good work ok.... if anyone tells you different tell me and I will hurt them ok.... I got your back and this poem is awesome and will never be anything less!!!
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