submission

submission

A furrow sliced into my heart
With the athame of your being

I have succumbed to your desire
with a vengeance of
unmitigated love
unable to satisfy my need
to please your deprived lust

I suffocate

drowning in the sea of my own soul

grant me the mystical key
that unlocks your favor

all my tomorrows are devoted to you
my soul has melted into your essence
the moment our flesh touched
I became your paramour
have mercy
take me

lock me in the catacombs
of your inner self

Author notes

An athame or athamé is a ceremonial black-handled knife

Submissiveness is the trait of being willing to yield to the will of another person or a superior force.

Within a relationship there may be a submissive partner. This partner may be trying to appease the other(s) through agreeing to their command.

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kiwigirljacks
July 10, 2008

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I just had to read this one with that title!!

Ooooo... I felt the heat rising up my neck reading this!! Phew!

I think in a way.. yielding, being the submissive, can even be its own form of control!! (well in my twisted mind lol)

This is brilliant!
MaMa-2-be-Cindy
January 31, 2008

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well luckily im at home and not work lol, so might be easier for me to read these things and be in the right place , apart form the fact that my mans at work lol

Wowee, I just loved this and I am ever so glad to be stumbling acorss another who enjoys a dive into the world of erotica. I love the darkness to it, incorporated so well with the erotica

Mmmmmmmmmm

I just loved this part the very most --
all my tomorrows are devoted to you
my soul has melted into your essence
the moment our flesh touched
I became your paramour
have mercy
take me

I think being submissive is fun in the bedroom

Awesome writing here, I do indeed look forward to more

Cindy
shattered logic
February 8, 2007

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hey,
Nice write I think the music calms the reader and goes very well with your piece, which flows very well I agree with tattboy, you have some nice metaphors, this is very well done good job and good luck!!!
The Poetic Angel
February 8, 2007
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nice one
Tattboy
February 7, 2007

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A very accomplished poem, lots of very good metaphors here.

I love the ending ...

"take me

lock me in the catacombs
of your inner self"

Good luck in My contest.

Tattboy
Im3
January 29, 2007

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In awe
"Lock me in the catacombs of your inner self" is wonderful. Lust is a place most of us know and have seen, but descriptions like this few have laid eyes on. Your command of vocabulary is stunning, making me know and see your talent is blended with academics. Few people have that gift. I loved it!!!
Fire N Ice
January 28, 2007
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BEAUTIFUL
This is amazing,
love in the purest form,
to give yourself completly to another..
January 27, 2007

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Pure love in Submission!
To truly love is to give it – not to receive it!
When you expose yourself to ALL the possibilities;
You will be truly happy!

Submission is that ultimate gift to expose yourself to love.

Furrow sliced into my heart;
to impart!

The athamé of your being!

Which is the vessel to control the power that nature’s passion brings!

Unmitigated love – what we dream of!

So nice…

Great imagery, here my friend!

Unable to satisfy my need to please your deprived lust.

We are all creatures of lust!

Grant me the mystical key that unlocks your favor!

WOW! Moving!

“all my tomorrows are devoted to you
my soul has melted into your essence
the moment our flesh touched
I became your paramour
have mercy take me”

You can see the submission in these heartfelt words!

BRAVO BRAVO BRAVO!