You asked me for a poem
to fly to where you are.
I let the eagle loose
from the strap that held him down.
Have you seen it, gathering
strong sticks and phrases
while it waited for cracking eggs?
Did you see it, on strident wings,
rise so high we could no longer see it?
God did. He waited for it to light
on his hand and whispered
sacred songs to it,
let it fall free back to me,
and I sent him on to you.
It swooped and put our prayers
and my poem, on your hand.
Author notes
they are the immortal birds...
Have you seen birds
flying?
Flying towards the end of the sky
where God lives
which birds are they how can, they fly so high?
And what they mean to go to the God?
Do you know
let me tell you
about these birds
they are birds coming from the hearts of yours
as words when you pray to God
our prayer's words are turned into the birds
and fly towards the God ...You know
they are the immortal birds
carrying your messages to the almighty
all the messages which you send while facing the problems
over this Earth time and time again
don't forget to fly these
birds by the means of prayer words of yours
they all are the saviors as well
amen......
© PrabhuDayal Khattar
painting by robshoeglenesk
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A contest entry
- rewrite a write-2 by PrabhuDayal Khattar.
425 points, ended February 12, 2007, 9 entries
Gold trophy winner
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let it fall free back to me,
and I sent him on to you...
This is so true and reflect the universal journey of the life as well..My friend I am grateful you for your so beautiful entry in my contest...
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You are welcome, dear friend. Your poem, as with so many of your poems, touches the core of what I believe.
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Great Write
Love you description of the eagle and his flight.
favorite lines:
God did. He waited for it to light
on his hand and whispered
sacred songs to it,
let it fall free back to me,
and I sent him on to you.
This was just the awesome response of what the eagle was to do.
Good luck in the contest
God Bless
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It is part of my belief, as a native american, that the eagle does, indeed fly up closes to creator's ear and mouth. Thank you for your kind comment.
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awesome
this is well written
i enjoyed reading this
very good
and good luck in the contest -
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thank you, southpaw. I appreciate your stop by to comment. Poems like these, that come from my native voice, are some of my favorites.
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Carol . . . wonderful, wonderful, wonderful . . . unfortunately up here on the West Coast a small group of misguided natives were murdering this most sacred of birds and selling their talons for profit. It saddened me to hear of this, because I have learned so much through my studies of Native American culture.
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Yes, I have heard through the smoke signals that such was happening. They were charged, were they not? We were told to gather our own and not purchase them from people we do not know. We can get them from fish and game if we must.
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