Sweet little girl.
She was only twelve.
Momma's got a new boyfriend,
and he's got her brainwashed.
Sweet Vanessa...
what did they do to you?
Again and again he hits her
again and again she falls
begging for mercy,
begging for relief.
Imagine her cries,
imagine her pain.
there was no way
for her to get away.
Momma's too scared to stop him
so she decides to help.
Alone, so alone.
Sweet Vanessa...
what did they do to you?
The fear, overwhelming,
how long does this have to last?
Please God, let her die.
Innocent and pure.
Just twelve.
Momma beats her too,
Momma doesn't care.
Is there no love for her?
The one who should've cared
locks her in the basement.
Punishment undeserved.
Never ceasing.
Sweet, sweet Vanessa...
what did they do to you?
Starving in the dark,
so young,
so hurt.
Is there no hope?
All alone.
No friends, no hugs,
just tears, just fears.
No food, no room,
just fists, just screams.
Please God, let her go,
take her to you.
Sweet, sweet Vanessa,
they killed you.
A tender spirit,
a smiling face,
broken, smashed,
innocent and sweet,
young and bright.
Found in a ravine,
her parents lied.
Sweet poetic justice,
they're in jail,
she's in paradise.
Author notes
This poem is about a girl that was in the newspapers where I lived many years ago. She was abused by her mother and her mother's boyfriend. They starved her and finally killed her. They left her body in a ravine and told the police she went into a service station and never came out. They claimed to know nothing. But they're in jail for life. There is now a pillar erected by the ravine where she was found.
I wrote it for the contest 'losing a loved one' because I found it amazing how even though she never felt loved in her life, there are flowersa and teddy bears placed by her pillar regularly. Somebody loves her. And somebody lost her.
Dear Katie,
dude!
-Me
A contest entry
- Round 1 of 5 (My second 5-part contest) by Kei-Aira.
300 points, ended February 5, 2007, 52 entries
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This poem is a beautiful yet so sad! It is awful that this piece, so wonderfully written, had to be based on true accounts.... it makes it all the more devestating!!
~Katie -
So sad
That is such a terrible way for any child to be treated. But you truly captured the intensity and drama in this powerful poem. Really grabs the reader.
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It is. And what makes it sadder is that this happens every day. =(. Thanks for your comment!
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Thank you for taking the time to enter this contest and the best of luck to you.
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This is a very sad poem and you manage to tell the story quite well. personally I think the poem doesn't flow very well, but it is certainly an emotional read.
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No, I agree, it doesn't flow well! I don't think it was meant to. This was just the way it came out and I think trying to fix it to flow better or to rhyme or anything like that would ruin it, so I just left it the way it was. Thanks for commenting!
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i have to say this caught my eye because my girlfriend is named vanessa and...shes suffered pains when she was younger.... not physically, but the pain expressed here was remarkably similar to what i feel for her whenever i think about her then.... this was incredibly well done....thank you for a beautiful piece
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Thank you for commenting! I'm sorry to hear about your girlfriend. She is good to have someone like you to care.
Love,
Missy.
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