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I Am Death

I've watched many a man march down the path
Unknowing of his true destination
Thinking he'll take an overdue shower,
But then meet his finalization.

I've heard the last minute prayers
Of the women and young children too.
They cry out in agonzing tones
As they know what I'll soon do.

It was horrible to watch them approach
And not be able to say a thing.
I knew what the outcome would be,
The bitter consequences it would bring.

And if I could have stopped the gas
I would have spared all their lives.
But men controlled my worst actions
And did worse than a thousand knives.

I've cradled lifeless bodies within
The sturdy structure I used to be.
I've looked upon men carrying them out.
It's nothing anyone should see.

I am a cause for broken families,
Missing grandfathers, mothers, and friends.
I am a hated remembrance of a time
That you truly can't comprehend.

Author notes

about the gas chambers used in during the Holocaust. I'm sure if they could speak, it would be more terrifying than mere words can express.

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  • CloudlessClimbs
    July 8, 2007
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    Very Original

    Very original idea, writing from the walls view point.. I liked how you bring out the fact that evil humans can turn otherwise harmless builings or materials into somthing evil to suit their needs. You also did a great job helping your reader visualize the terror they felt, and the sorrow anyone not insane should have felt. Very good, keep it up ;p

  • Virgoan
    June 6, 2007

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    Original, intriguing and sorrowful. The words depicted clear pictures of life lost and memories seemingly not found or even the worst - erased.

    My favorite lines:

    I've cradled lifeless bodies within
    The sturdy structure I used to be.
    I've looked upon men carrying them out.
    It's nothing anyone should see.

    Well captured, it makes the readers bleed into tears in thy soul.

    Thanks for sharing and I wish you all the best in the contest. Keep writing my friend.

    ~VIRGOAN~


  • Heavens Child
    May 2, 2007

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    A very powerful write.... I don't even think we can comprehend or imagine what it was like for those people, realizing they were about to die. Awesome flow and rhyme. Thank you for the entry in my contest.


  • Melodies
    January 28, 2007
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    Ah, I knew what the poem was saying...

    and felt the wall talking so that it cut right into my heart. You have written a fabulous poem that is filled with the most tender thoughts. Thank you for sharing your wonderful talent with us.