I can fly high in the sky.
I can do anything
I wish that i could see you
again.
But moving on I miss you.
I would choose you
than the million poeple
to choose
I wish that I
could see you.
I wish that we were
together.
But I'm still holding on
I can make it, but not too far
I wish that could see you
Please tell me what you think
Comments
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This poem is amazeing! I really like this and i love how you tell that you miss someone that has left you(died). This has just the right amount of emotions in it and just enough feelings! I can relate to this poem...I miss a few people in my life that have passed away! This poem means a lot to me...You are a great writter and I would love to read more from you! Have a WONDERFUL day!
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Wonderful!!! Gift, gift, you have the gift. You created an image in my mind. That’s the whole point; take me to the movies, show me a painting in my mind! Your flow is good but it can be better; after your write, check every word for synonyms. It will make a good poem great, improve the flow and make the image more 3 dimensional. The “i” in the first stanza should be capitalized, it makes the reader stop. You misspelled people. And I think the structure needs to be more aesthetic, remember this isn’t an English assignment, it’s an art and you’re the artist. Don’t go by these contests either; the judges don’t know what they are looking at, I lost a contest here on a poem that made me $10,000.
Blessings,
Amera
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