My first teacher:
For pinching my thighs
For adding that horrible accent to my language
For making me count, add and make stupid patterns
out of corn and beans
Fuck you!
My first desk mate
For popping out your tiny limp dick during the lesson
And forcing me to look
And tearing my assignment page when I did not
Fuck you!
My Primary School best friend
For using my brains
By letting me share assignments with you
And later moving with other girls
Fuck you!
My teenage girlfriends
For moving with crowds
Even though everyone else thought we were cool
For not being as daring as me
And mostly getting me into trouble
Fuck you!
My girlfriend
For kissing me first
For touching me first
For loving me first
For letting me love you
And letting me love a man too
Love you
My first boyfriend
For honestly expecting to taste my sweet love bud
In the darkness, on the rough road
And you wanted me to remain standing
through the whole process
Fuck you!
Author notes
"Something in the way"
Please tell me what you think
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that is a very creative write. I would not of thought of it. I have send the same words many times fuck you in other adjectives that need not be mention. I am writing a book about poems and the struggle with self worth. That was the conclusion I hope my reader would find for themselves. Thanks for reading my work.
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Sounds like you needed to vent a little. you vent very well. I love this. I never knew you could write such a beautiful poem called fuck you. Well done.
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lol love it. fuck the boyfriend... not literally... and love the girlfriend! its awesome
great write. i enjoyed it
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I think its kinnda funny.......lol
good work........
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A great piece of work and a catchy titl. The last stanza gave me a great chuckle brings back memories.
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This is really different but i love the fuck you bit. Great job making up something different. I loved it!
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This is what I like to see
It's definitely a far cry from the most poetic thing I've ever read, but the ever present "Fuck you"s makes up for it. -
Alrighty then...
Now that you have that off of your chest, I hope you move on and get a life.
That next to last stanza felt WAAAAAAAY out of place in this "rant" poem.
And shame on him for expecting you to "stand through the whole process."
I wish you the best in life.
Becky
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Interesting
wonderful way to release emotions- best of luck in your contest
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Something i've never heard before
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I remember this. It's one of my favourites.
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i like the paragraphg by paragraph stories, perhaps you could elaborate more into them a bit, give more details? but i do like yje fuck you's at the end, and maybe moving the love you ending to the last paragraph to contrast it a little better.. but i like it thanx for entering & good luck!
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I looooooooove this!!!! It's so straight and to the point!!!! Good luck in the contest!!!!
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sometimes "fuck you" says it all.
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I know............
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I like this! I can feel your pain on the third one, I was always the smart one, till I fried my brain anyway, now i'm lucky if i can remember my breakfast, anyway back to the poem, I can feel fifth one too, except for the man part, mine's all jealous. lol, anyway back to the poem, again (sorry i tend to be a bit scatterbrained), I really like this, especially the way you said Fuck you in every part but the fourth one, it kinda sticks out how you care about your girlfriend, And the way it ends with Fuck you, pulls it together nicely!
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Thanks so much for your comment,am glad you understand exactly where am coming from.
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Love the title...
author's notes... it's in the submit form... I think after the catagories. Put your user name so this doesn't get dq'd. It's a good piece and should be a contender.
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follow the rules, not that hard-
please put your user name in the box, or i'll remove your entry -
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Please help me because I can't see the box. Where is it?
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Piece of work!
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Totally expresses how I fell sometimes.I love to tell people off when they piss me off.Such fun.
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Sometimes you just gotta do it and get it over with.
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everything i ever wanted to say
but was always to shy to do it!!!! this kicks massive amounts of that ass!!!!!
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You know when you are trying to grow up but you still have nags behind you?.........well, fuck them!
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