Kettle sweltering in my bed,
Nighttime sky turns blue too red.
Stomach jangles trying to sleep,
Cockroaches neither food nor do they creep.
Accepted the spirit I did
Pray to the Lord peepers begin to close,
Affectionate blankets to my nose.
Ticking clock a loud midnight,
Stars to night burn so bright.
Accepted that spirit in Fiji old me I rid
Movement shows one standing near the bathroom door,
Bed moves although bolted to the floor.
From my bedroom to the kitchen too,
Quivering a little then, what impairment can they do?
Accepted that spirit years ago
Reminiscences of Fiji are increasingly consequently strong,
Happy, distressing to political erroneous it pong.
Obligated to inscribe what they tell me,
It’s the only way to sense and see.
Accepted that spirit life began to grow.
Art to be completed with these sessions of rhyme,
Not in a rush all acquires time.
A blessing, enlighten of families that are sick,
If I could give Doctor the flick.
Accepted that spirit gave my heart
Candles and mirrors collapse to some appalling bad luck,
To my mum she had to duck.
Never did like the blessing that orate all not well,
Bestow on me odd feelings who do I tell?
Accepted that spirit my born day start
After an agitated night I awaken to sleep,
Alarm with a pulsating squeaky peep.
Accepted that spirit into my mind,
Agreement with Christ Jesus I had to bind.
Please tell me what you think
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Very sincere and spiritual write from you my friend. To give the Lord our self is to have a faith so solid that miracles can occur. I enjoyed this and hope all is well with you.
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Inner deep and true
Spiritual essence in all its glory pronounce a resurgence many only can hope for and for which this mighty found. Nice write.
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Beautiful write. I'm not a religious person, but more spiritual, yet I liked this piece a lot. I think when we accept something in our lives whether it be a God or spirit or maybe a friend or family member or even something about ourselves, we can find a peace within our heart and soul. Anyway, great write. Keep writing.
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An excellent write. Good luck on your trip, Ros -
I am not a religious person at all and yet this piece spoke to me. I can relate with some of what it says and that is amazing to me. You have pictured a great work here and I applaud you. Well done. Keep them coming and blessed be.
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I love the idea of a poem inside a poem, that's incredible. What a great write with smooth flowing ryhmes. I can feel the passion emerging through your words. It's amazing the effect spirituality can have on a person.
Renee
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Thank you very much Renee I agree great spiritual awareness make one so strong in the eyes of God. How wonderful to receive such positive comments back it does make us stronger and makes us better poets. I really do appreciate them; Please keep up your fantastic writing I will be flying on Monday to come to USA so I might be off the air for a while. But that don’t mean I forgot to read or make my small contribution OK.
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Incredible write Steve!!! It has so much to think about living within it and makes one stop in their tacks to really wonder of things. The way you allow the reader to feel they are trapped in a night time nightmare is great!! In the end, Jesus is always the answer.
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Now I am getting a little bit red around the gills I really don’t deserve such praise as this I don’t. We serve a holy and righteous God that sees all and you my friend will be truly blessed this is for certain, I will be still now cause I am speechless. GOD BLESS YAH FROM DEE AND ME.
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wow!
this is another great poem, my dear. i know what the broken mirror refers to; this poem is hopeful in a wonderful way of one coming out of darkness and into the light. great work!!
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very deep. the rhythm and rhyme are perfect. thie imagery is great. i kept seeing that bogieman. you did an amazing job with this. your talent is shining through. Keep writing. God bless you
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Precise, precocious, and penetrating. This poem is unsually cool. I like it a lot. thanks for sharing such words and thought with me.
Very deep poem and arising a lot of further thoughts-thats what poetry should do-ask and give the reader a chance to think about his life and perhaps find an answer-this poem does what it promises-great job. this was very enlightening.This is an exceptionally well-written with wonderful flow that adds greatly to the power of your words. I wish i could in my own words tell you how great this piece is without having to borrow from others.What an intricate piece, if it doesn't get you to stop and think, and be a little philosophical, then i think you missed the point.
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