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Birth

Damp moisture,
    wet, it was fresh,
        it was
The smell of life.

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A quick four-liner I wrote.

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  • LongHairedBaldGuy
    January 27, 2007

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    Four lines, four thousand pictures. BRAVO!!! This is so sharp, crisp, and clear. So precise, and so enveloping. Everything, in a pinprick, as it were. Do I have to say, "I like it."?


    • nish81
      January 27, 2007
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      Thanks! My aim with this poem was to create a very clear picture, so it's nice to see that I succeeded!