I just want to get the rush
From the exilerating pain
watch the blood flow down
and build up the red stain
I just want to see the puddle
While I lay there on the floor
Lifeless and amazingly free
And no one opens the door
I just want to see my death
I want to see if anyone would cry
I don't think that anyone even cares
They all want me to die
I just need a reason
Before I take my last breath
Why no one even cared
Just came to see my death
I just want to know
Why doesn't anyone even care
I'm so alone and empty
All they do is stand and stare
I just need to be safe
From all the hurt you gave to me
All the tears and blood
Please let me be set free
I just want to be me
and actually be someone
that people actually care about
Before my life is done
I just want to die
Walk towards the bright light
never turn back or regret a thing
good bye everyone and good night
Author notes
option 3
A contest entry
- Sad Dark Depressing...... by Ntagatf.
400 points, ended February 23, 2007, 103 entries
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Please tell me what you think
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this poem reminds me of myself... its amazing how much it does though. and a lil scary... i can't stop reading it! but i love it too much to care. keep it up, cya chik. -vamp
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Very pretty... good luck with the competition.
Particularly loved these lines,
"I just need to be safe
From all the hurt you gave to me
All the tears and blood
Please let me be set free
I just want to be me
and actually be someone
that people actually care about
Before my life is done"
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wow i love this so so much its so realistic... this is how i've been feeling lately... very suicidal, but i've kinda always been that way so... anyway amazing write!!! Thank you for entering my contest.... you need to place your option # in the authors box or you'll be disqualified and i dont wanna do that so please fix it asap?!?!? Good luck in my contest!! and keep up the good work!
~tearstaindangel~ -
This is such a very deep and painfully drawn piece. Well expressed with such a very dark sense of esteem and worth. In the event of sounding like many others - I will say I don't believe anyone has to feel like this. If this is a personal write, I hope that you will find the courage to reach out and let someone in who can help - without judgement. Best wishes!
[This line poetically seemed out of sync - or am I reaing it wrong?
'I just want to be set me']
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WOW... Im sure depressed now..This was a great piece and fit the bill for the contest for sure. Great job
Soulful Woman
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