Wrapped in chantilly lace,
sashaying by window's light,
come hither look,so intense,
her smile pierces the night.
Moon rise above the valley,
garden of fertility,
penetrating rain soaks in,
tantalizing such beauty.
Petals sit upon the stem,
rising higher with the breeze,
to and fro, gentle movement,
bud prepares its gentle tease.
Dewdrops upon the petals,
velvety touch quenches thirsts,
fragrance as sweet as honey,
opening, the flower bursts,
Rain down upon the valley,
let the river flow with ease,
oh flower be contented,
let your nectar drip to please.
In a list
A contest entry
- If I felt anymore my senses would explode by tomisb.
850 points, ended February 15, 2007, 11 entries
Honorable winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
Comments
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Beautiful!!!
I hail this to be the most beautiful exposition of love and passion. I simply loved the metaphor used. U tell so much while not telling anything at all! This poetry is as magnificient as love itself. I read it twice... wish there was more of it. But I guess that the whole point- to leave people wanting for more. U are an amazing poet... Keep creating magic. *Note: U've been hoodwinked by the Poetic Bandit group. This is to simply tell u that we loved your work.
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Absolutely enchanting! This piece shows the truest degree of allure and sensuality. Your imagery is dripping rich and the flow of this piece is superb. A simply stunning metaphoric write. Very nicely done!
~Lori
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Great Comment!!!!!!!!!
Hello Ink Artist, Thank you so much for stopping by and leaving a nice comment. You take care, Sandy
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Just delightful from beginning to end. The flow is soft and the imagery is serene. It brought warmth to my heart and yet another subzero morning!
Bravo!
Marianne
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Wonderful Comment!!!!
Hello Marianne, Your comment was so nice and appreciated. Thank you for stopping by. You take care, Sandy
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Absolutely Divine
This is such a heavenly writing that is dripping with serenity and purity of Mother Nature from teh start till the end. It flows like a gentle river while nectar drips from flowers...magnificent is not the word that can justify, then there is no words put together can capture teh beauty of this poem. Good luck in teh contest but I call it a winner.. Thanks for sharing your beautiful talent....Take Care & God Bless!
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I love the analogy of a garden, the sensuousnes of flowers, and the beauty of blooming from the inside out...the rain and the rivers, the curents of life. Lovely.
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This is so lovely Sandy, i just love the words you use in this, it makes it so dreamy and calming. Which is good for me cause i've had a stressful and tiring day. This is so beautiful, i love the imagery here!
Bravo, a truly lovely write.
Michelle
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Most beautifully written! Sigh...
Your pen drips the most beautiful ink, Sandy
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Beautiful, I love it!!!
"Rain down upon the valley,
let the river flow with ease,
oh flower be contented,
let your nectar drip to please."
Good luck my friend!!!
hugsss
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Breath taking poetry
Soft and beautiful. The imagery you created in this poem makes it come alive. It is so very warm and so inviting. It is just so very beautiful. Even the picture you picked out for this poem fits so perfectly. The soft colours and the beauty of your poem really does capture the hearts and imagination of anyone reading it. The rhyming scheme is not forced but flows as naturally as your beeting heart. This only shows the strength and the tenderness of your poetic heart.
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What a lovely comment my friend
Hello Ed,
You comment was so lovely and made me smile. I so glad you enjoyed it. Always so wonderful to hear from you. You are so sweet and leave such heartfelt comments. Thank you my friend. Many hugs and smiles to you. Take care and Blessings to you.
Always, Sandy
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PASSIONATE AND OH SO LOVELY!
Such a sweet write of passion and nature combined. Nature does have a beautiful way of bringing out our passions and love.
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Beautiful Comment!!!!!!!!!!!!!!
Thank you Kevin. Your comment was lovely. Yes nature and passion go hand in hand and we can write so many words that describe both in a sensual way. So glad you enjoyed my friend. You are a wonderful friend to me and so many. Take care, Sandy
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wonderful work
Sandy, my ooh my your pen has been alive and enchanting,
What a lovely write soft in flow and beautiful in words, Always a joy to stop by your page,
Tearz so enjoying your talent.
Love and Light
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LOVELY COMMENT !!!!!
Good Morning Frozentearz, It is so nice to hear from you. (I am glad you enjoyed my poem. I always appreciate your thoughts. You take care, Have a great day, Sandy
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Classy and Beautiful
Wow, metaphors are superior in this. Such taunting and teasing and very classy word choice here. Sensual and lusting tied into gentle love. Fantastic write. A true pleasure to read and reflect in the words as the images of form in the mind.
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A BEAUTIFUL COMMENT!!!!
Thank you June, Your comment was so lovely, I don't know where this one came from, I suspect it was from the love I still have in my heart for a special man I miss dearly. Take care and have a wonderful day. Stay warm my friend . Sandy
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Beautiful
So precious is this.So soft and alluring.You have written this the way that true love should be.Sensuous yet gentle, Ros -
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LOVELY COMMENT !!!!!
Hello Ros, I want to thank you for stopping by and leaving a lovely comment on my poem. You take care, Sandy
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Oh my
what a sensuous platter you have laid before us, every verse so full of vivid images and tangible wordplay. I enjoyed this work very much, truly a poem that one will feel, not merely read and reflect upon. Off to read more of your works now, but kudos for the great write, it made my mouth water (not in a perverted way :-p)
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Beautiful Comment!!!!!!!!!!!!!!
Well your comment was so nice. I am glad you enjoyed my poem. I don't write too many sensuous poems, so I am glad you liked it. You take care and have a wonderful weekend. Sandy
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This is a pretty piece you have penned here. Very well done and best wishes
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Nice Comment
Hello Finding Fate, I want to thank you for stopping by and reading my poem. Your comment was lovely and most appreciated. You take care, Sandy
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Wow...each word is like a soft petal from a flower. It so gently touches each of our senses. The picture is exquisite and your words go so well.
Soulful Woman
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Love Your Positive Comment!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!
Hello Soulful Woman, Always so nice to hear from you. Your lovely comment is so appreciated. You take care, Sandy
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I love the first verse
This is a very sensuous poem. You enchant with the images and you show more than you tell. Well done,Best of luck in the contest. Love, Tom B. -
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LOVELY COMMENT !!!!!
Thank you Tom for the nice comment. This is a lwonderful contest. Take care Sandy
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So lovely, these words, pure and delectable as the flowers and the picture. You have woven a fine piece and good luck in the contest.
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GREAT COMMENT!!!!!!!!
Hello Cannonsfire, Thank you for stopping by and commenting on my poem. Always nice to hear from you . It is appreciated. You take care. Hope you are enjoying the weekend. Sandy
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Exceptional !!
I think the picture and the poem fit hand in hand! A very well done poem in good taste and very romatic! Beautiful job in wording this.. you have alot of passion and it sure shows through in this! thanks for a wonderful write!
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Love Your Positive Comment!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!
WOW semperfimom, Your comment was so nice to read. Very encouraging. Always so nice to read positive comments. You take care, Sandy
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