His name engraved into my heart.
His hand print embedded in mine.
The taste of him remained on my lips,
I refused to say goodbye.
After the lies,
And all the pain he'd brought on,
Through all our fights,
I couldn't imagine having to move on.
Long talks on the phone,
Lasting until early morning.
Trying to figure out what was going on,
I got so sick of hearing sorry.
Trust,
It made me want to scream.
He said it was there,
But I didn't think it was really.
So many times, I sat in my room,
Just crying my eyes out.
I wanted him to know how I felt,
But when I heard him crying, I couldn't shout.
I always knew I loved him,
But sometimes, I just wanted to hate him.
Yet no matter what, I still cared.
And for that, I just wanted to hate him again.
But through it all,
The relationship is strong.
Though we want to always be right,
Even though sometimes we're wrong.
Emotion, and passion,
A burning flame.
Can't be put out,
With just trickling rain.
Problems have come and gone,
But the love has yet to fade away.
Tears have fallen and dried,
But in my heart his name remains.
Author notes
Option #1...Umm....I really don't know what to say this is about, just me and my bf, and stuff we've gone through, but he will always remain in my heart....-*-Love Bites-*-
☼BLONDIE☼
A contest entry
- The One Love Contest That's Different by musical-psycho.
450 points, ended January 28, 2007, 11 entries
Gold trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
Comments
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I really liked this poem. It completely captured the true nation of a relationship. I've never truly understood people who said "We never fight, everything's perfect". They must be in denial. I was particularly taken with the last stanza. Prolems and problems go but love remains. Very well done.
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Kylie,
This is a very nice piece. And you were right, your frist stanza:
"His name engraved into my heart.
His hand print embedded in mine.
The taste of him remained on my lips,
I refused to say goodbye."
is your strongest. But this is what you were wrong about: the poem didn't go downhill from there. It's hard not to think that when your first stanza's so good, I almost typed "food", lol. But his piece is truly amazing and relatable and understandable. Nice piece.
- Cait -
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umm...
well i cant really relate to this, but its great. I think that its really good, u put all of ur emotions in this one piece. Great Write!
~kenz~
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A write that I can relate to, love comes with the happy times and also the times when we want to strangle our better halves but relationships are about give and take and honesty and as long as you have these and can admit your faults when you need to, you'll be okay.
Well written and indeed a pleasure to read....julie
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