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window shopping

her pawn-broken heart -
sold and re-sold
to hungry passers by,

slashed with barbed wire motives,
graffiti patched with myths and lies,
stuffed with plagiarised love,
mended with duct tape,

a list of heart pieces with
smudged and shadowed ink,
stained with felt-tip screaming,
cursed to a list of wingless fragments,

each piece a butterfly specimen,
stabbed to a tacky pin board
and shielded with inhibition’s
frosted window glass.

            (perhaps she’d be safe
              in this fantasy)


Author notes

Have you ever felt just like this? Like your heart is waiting in a second hand store and you wonder if anyone will ever want you again...
Part of you never wants to leave the safety of the window glass, but deep down you want to be bought and loved once more...

xoxo

In a list

A contest entry

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Comments

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  • Captain Obvious
    April 10, 2007
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    this was moving! very very very nice job! good luck!- Captain Obvious


  • deadcolor dreams
    March 20, 2007

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    This makes me feel so sad inside.
    But it's still an awesome poem. Great job!! I love you. In a non lesbian way.


  • Through Your Iris
    February 20, 2007

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    hmm...

    I liked how the poem started simple but progressively got more complex. In very little words, you conveyed a powerful poem and I enjoyed it.


  • kim5519
    February 14, 2007
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    I liked how the whole poem is like a metaphor. Nice job. Good luck in my contest. Very nice.


  • sweetpearl
    February 2, 2007

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    "stuffed with plagiarised love,
    mended with duct tape,"

    --excellent wording on this. The ending bracketed part is a great way to end and a thing to ponder indeed.


  • individuality gold member
    January 27, 2007

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    a good piece, nice imagery used here. i wish that you have good luck in this contest you have entered. spill ink and twist me into the crazy shape of love...


  • vitamin.M
    January 27, 2007

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    amazing poem
    i love it
    the first stanza
    makes me cry

    thanks for the note on mine
    <3

  • Stormraven
    January 27, 2007

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    Perhaps she would be safer in no fantasy Lol..You have described me perfectly , right down to the duct tape . This is a wonderful write ! A poem that enables the reader to see themselves is be far the greatest gift our pens can give , Storm


  • Heart Sutra
    January 26, 2007

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    This sounds very sad and broken hearted. Thank you for entering the contest.

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