Lonesome
is like the rain,
falling alone so vain.
And knowing it will not return,
too late for another lesson to learn.
Without having a heart to share,
it won't go anywhere.
And they call it
Lonesome.
A contest entry
- Rictameter Picture Competition for My Circle of Friends Only by ShelleyA.
500 points, ended January 27, 2007, 12 entries
Honorable mention
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - Form Contest - Rictameter by Seeking Peace.
750 points, ended August 21, 2007, 27 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
Comments
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Well done on a great piece here, you have made a seamless rictameter here, well done
Thank you for taking the time to enter this contest, I wish you the best of luck
Karen -
Hi Gary. Perfect syllable count. Nice title and theme. Very good flow, rhyme and tone. Nice imagery. Lovely expression of feeling. Good word choice. Nice simile. Thoughtful. A lovely write. Thank you for participating in our first group contest.
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impressive
yet heart-breaking..Good job very descriptive and vivid..Good luck in the contest, Brenda
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I enjoyed reading your rictameter with the imagery you incorporated here of a slow-drizzling rain. A beautiful visual for me. My best,
Belle
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this whole poem is a stroke of genuis, you did wonderfully on this keep it flowing and good luck in the contest my friend, this is a masterpiece
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this is a fantastic write.... i can nearly understand how it works too.... i am assuming that it is a syllable count ? you have done excellent with it...i love the background too
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this is a wonderful poem although about something so sad, and yet so true. excellent job on this. you are so talented. keep writing. God bless you
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Exceptional penning...
This is a lovely rictameter with a perfect syllable count and great rhyme...You have a wonderful knack of drawing the reader in to look more deeply into the meanings of every line, I've never really studied the word lonesome before, but you have enlarged it and given it depth through descriptive writing...I love the background by the way...wishing you well in the contest
Love and smiles...
~Lilac~
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Awesome job on this one! Making it rhyme can be a bit hard, eh? You make it seem rather easy though! Excellent flow... well done!
Best of wishes to you in the contest!!!
~Melissa
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Thank you Molassis, She always puts up such perfect pictures for inspiration, you can't help but stop and let the words pour.
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