School Disco again,
After I Hand in my ticket,
I walk straight in.
My friends are dancing,
The music is playing,
Bubbles rain down from the sky.
I feel you wacthing me,
My head turns,
Your eyes meet mine.
The music slows,
You ask for a dance,
I accept.
As your hands slip around my waist,
I feel your glances,
But I don't look up.
My head moves from your shoulder,
I didn't plan anything,
It just happened.
Before I know it,
My lips meet yours,
I carefully taste your mouth.
Before i know it,
The song has ended,
We stand a few more moments.
I part with sadness,
When I look at you again,
You are kissing someone else...
A contest entry
- January New Members Contest by AP Greeters.
600 points, ended February 15, 2007, 120 entries
Silver trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
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A warm welcome to All Poetry!
Oh my your dissapointment is really evident in here...this was quite a different first.
Thank you for entering the contest
I wish you luck and welcome you to All Poetry!
abscessed
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Welcome to AP
And thanks for your entry.
Before I forget where I saw it--third stanza--"wacthing" should be "watching"
You give us a very vivid picture of the happening. While it is a bit of a dissappointing circumstance, it is a dissappointment that a huge portion of the population can relate to.
Best of luck in the contest and keep the ink flowing. -
Thanks for entering
This is truly sad. To have your first kiss and then to realise you were just an object, one of many, nothing truly special.
A different take on your first kiss and this is refreshing.
Let the ink flow and your fingers dance
Rosemary -
Thanks for the entry and welcome to the site!
Kiss and run… !!men!! Although it sounds like a bitter sweet memory it was still a beautiful way to get that first kiss. Awesome job, I loved the read Thank you very much for taking the time to write for and enter our contest. Best wishes and welcome to Allpoetry
Dove
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Thanks for sharing
Oh man I feel for you, just a runaway kisser. That is not good. Good flow and structure. Thanks for sharing.
Good luck in the contest and welcome to allpoetry. I encourage you to keep writing to read and comment.
God Bless
Tammy
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