Rain falling from my long dirty hair.
Jim and john have no words just their glare.
Looking at my helmet cleaning off the mud,
on one side the peace sign the other a bud.
Shaking my necklace 44 teeth in all,
watching the phone box hoping for no call.
Sitting in this jungle with no way out,
panic inside when i hear the children shout.
Time to move again, time to pillage,
take women, children, men all inside the village.
Separate men, they are all Vietcong.
try to turn you head, kill all sense of right and wrong.
After all is done time to move ahead,
Laughing, bragging, 17 more teeth from the dead.
hoping not for another call,
to kill these people with no reason at alL.
A contest entry
- Soldiers by darkangelcutter.
400 points, ended March 19, 2008, 18 entries
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I am not getting at too much just wondering what they were teaching kids in school now days about Vietnam if anything.. if your not wanting to be a Marine it hardly matters to me.. I know about the teeth collection by a minority..... most before the seventies kept a bandage on one side of the helment and insect spray on the other and most decorated the helments yeah..the rest of your write happened during the seventies when it did happen it is a very sad thing that war long hair a Marine that makes me smile.Had to be army yes?
Your write is very descriptive and colorful you have a way with words.
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thank you is want i want to start out with!!! thank you for writing in my contest, and thank you for not writing a pre write, everyone write them and i love it when people dont. i really like this i could only image this was a very hard time for you? are you serving or did you?
thank you
blessings
shannon
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Your 18 and you want to be a Marine? Is your poem suppose to be factual for Vietnam to you?
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you seem to be on a war kick. I like it. You grasp the real horror of war.
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Your not kidding BabyBowserRule?? you think Marines went around doing this and looking like this in Vietnam? Do you want to be a Marine too?
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No I don't want to be a marine, but I do respect them very much. One of my close friends left for Iraq on March 5, 2008. My best friends step dad is nam veteran and I've heard stories that you could only dream up. Vietnam was terrible and that poem captured a huge light of what went on in that cruel and chaotic world.
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no ma'am i do not have a want to become a marine. and yes i do know people that collected teeth for a kill count in Vietnam. im not sure what you were getting at but thank you for reading.
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